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Jimmy wells and Bob was fast friend. They lived in New York. Jimmy was 20 year old and Bob was 18 year old. Jimmy was honest and dutiful. He did not want to leave New York. Bob was ambitious and only money was important for him. One day at pm they ate food together in restaurant and promised each other that after twenty years, they will have meet at same time and place. Bob went to Chicago and earned more money. Jimmy lived in New York and became a soldier. After 20 year Bob returned from Chicago to met his old friend. He reached at sharp 10:00 pm on the same spot. He struck a match-stick to light a cigar. In the light of match-stick , Jimmy recognised him. Bob was criminal whom Chicago police want to arrested him. Jimmy did not understand what to do ? He thought of a way. he told another soldier who wore simple clothes to arrested Bob. Bob was arrested by another soldier. Hence Jimmy completed his duty.

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I'm not as good in the English language as others members of the forums. Even so, I found some mistakes.

jazzzyJimmy wells and Bob was fast friend.

Jimmy Wells and Bob were ........

jazzzyOne day at pm

Time is missing before p.m. secondly, never forget to put a period before "m" while writing p.m or a.m.

jazzzythey ate food together in restaurant

they dined at a restaurant.

jazzzyand promised each other that after twenty years, they will have meet at same time and place.

and promised to meet (again) at the same time and place after twenty years.

jazzzyAfter 20 year Bob returned from Chicago to met his old friend.

After 20 years Bob came back (may be) from Chicago to meet (always use 1st form of verb after "to") his old friend.

jazzzyHe reached at sharp 10:00 pm on the same spot.

He turned up for their rendezvous.

jazzzy In the light of match-stick , Jimmy recognised him.

In the light of the matchstick. .........

jazzzyBob was criminal whom Chicago police want to arrested him.

Bob was the criminal who was wanted by the Chicago police.

Hope this helps. Can't do the rest of the story.

jazzzy

Jimmy wells and Bob was fast friend. They lived in New York. Jimmy was 20 year old and Bob was 18 year old. Jimmy was honest and dutiful. He did not want to leave New York. Bob was ambitious and only money was important for him. One day at pm they ate food together in restaurant and promised each other that after twenty years, they will meet at same time and place. Bob went to Chicago and earned more money. Jimmy lived in New York and became a soldier. After 20 year Bob returned from Chicago to meet his old friend. He reached the meeting spot at 10:00 am sharp. He struck a match-stick to light a cigar. In the light of match-stick , Jimmy recognised him. Bob was a criminal whom the Chicago police wanted to arrest. Jimmy did not understand what to do ? He thought of a way , he told another soldier who wore simple clothes to arrest Bob. Bob was arrested by another soldier. Hence Jimmy completed his duty.

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