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Topic: In order to learn a language well, we should learn about the culture and lifestyles of the people who speak that language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

When learning a foreign language, many people also learn about the country where the language comes from. In my opinion, students should understand the culture and lifestyles of those speaking the language, but only from when they reach a certain level of that language.

Unarguably, studying the culture of native speakers can foster learners to communicate that language more effectively and naturally. First, a country's history and lifestyles have an impact on the foundation and evolution of their language. For example, syntax, which is the order of words in a sentence, usually differs from language to language, reflecting the disparity in ways of seeing things between people who speak different languages. In addition, non-verbal language, such as body language, facial expressions, and physical gestures are also used to deliver a message. While silence often means agreement in English-speaking countries, it may convey a meaning of disagreement or even resentment in Asian nations. Learning non-verbal communication is thus of critical importance in mastering a language.

Despite the benefits expressed above, learning about culture when learning a foreign language should not be over-emphasized. At the very beginning, there are a rich variety of language aspects students have to cope with, such as grammar, pronunciation, basic vocabulary, and so forth. Widening their knowledge on this early stage may make students overwhelmed and stressful. Not until they have a solid foundation of a language should they start stretching themselves to broaden their know-how about lifestyles of native speakers.

In conclusion, learning about culture plays an integral role in enhancing students' language proficiency; however, for beginners, learning the language itself should be still the first priority.

Please help me correct this essay. Thank you a lot!

Topic: In order to learn a language well, we should learn about the culture and lifestyles of the people who speak that language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

When learning a foreign language, many people also learn about the country where the language comes from. In my opinion, students should understand the culture and lifestyles of those speaking the language, but only from when they reach a certain level of that language.

Unarguably, studying the culture of native speakers can foster learners to communicate that language more effectively and naturally. Firstly, a country's history and lifestyles have an impact on the foundation and evolution of their language. For example, syntax, which is the order of words in a sentence, usually differs from language to language, reflecting the disparity in ways of seeing things between people who speak different languages. In addition, non-verbal language, such as body language, facial expressions, and physical gestures are also used to deliver a message. While silence often means agreement in English-speaking countries, it may convey a meaning of disagreement or even resentment in Asian nations. Learning non-verbal communication is thus of critical importance in mastering a language.

Despite the benefits expressed above, learning about culture when learning a foreign language should not be over-emphasized. At the very beginning, there are a rich variety of language aspects students have to cope with, such as grammar, pronunciation, basic vocabulary, and so forth. Widening their knowledge on this early stage may make students overwhelmed and stressful. Not until they have a solid foundation of a language should they start stretching themselves to broaden their know-how about lifestyles of native speakers.

In conclusion, learning about culture plays an integral role in enhancing students' language proficiency; however, for beginners, learning the language itself should be still the first priority.
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I don't think this is what you are asking. Instead, I think you are asking this: Please help me to improve my essay by pointing out any mistakes or issues.


Topic: In order to learn a language well, we should learn about the culture and lifestyles of the people who speak that language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

When learning a foreign language, many people also learn about the country where the language comes from. In my opinion, students should understand the culture and lifestyles of those speaking the language, but only from when (after?) they reach a certain level of proficiency in that language.

Unarguably, studying the culture of native speakers can foster (Incorrect usage) learners to communicate that language more effectively and naturally. First, a country's history and lifestyles have an impact on the foundation and evolution of their language. For example, syntax, which is the order of words in a sentence, usually differs from language to language, reflecting the disparity in ways of seeing things between people who speak different languages. In addition, non-verbal language, such as body language, facial expressions, and physical gestures are also used to deliver a message. While silence often means agreement in English-speaking countries, it may convey a meaning of disagreement or even resentment in Asian nations. Learning non-verbal communication is thus of critical importance in mastering a language.

Despite the benefits expressed above, learning about culture when learning a foreign language should not be over-emphasized. At the very beginning, there are a rich variety of language aspects students have to cope with, such as grammar, pronunciation, basic vocabulary, and so forth. Widening their knowledge on this early stage may make students (missing word) overwhelmed and stressful. (incorrect usage) Not until they have a solid foundation of a language should they start stretching themselves to broaden their know-how (too informal, incorrect usage) about lifestyles of native speakers.

In conclusion, learning about culture plays an integral role in enhancing students' language proficiency; however, for beginners, learning the language itself should be still (word order) the first priority.

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Yes, what I meant is please help me to improve my essay.

Following your reply, I corrected the mistakes I made as below. Could you please help point out any mistakes I still made? Thanks a lot for your kind help!

...but only after they reach a certain level of proficiency in that language

...studying the culture of native speakers can help learners to communicate that language more effectively and naturally (Which word should I use in stead of help?)

Firstly,...

Widening their knowledge at this early stage may make the students overwhelmed and stressed

...a solid foundation for a language

...to broaden their knowledge --> which word I should use as a replacement of knowledge? (I used the words knowledge many times above)

...learning the language itself should still be the first priority

ntnguyenanhFirstly,...

Use first, second, third, ... seventh... eleventh... it is much cleaner than the awkward firstly, secondly, thirdly ... seventhly ... eleventhly Emotion: ick!

ntnguyenanh...studying the culture of native speakers can help learners to communicate that language more effectively and naturally (Which word should I use in stead of help?)

With these synonyms, you may have to re-word the sentence a little:

encourage, inspire, promote interest, stimulate the curiosity, motivate,

ntnguyenanhWidening their knowledge at this early stage may make the students feel overwhelmed and stressed
ntnguyenanh...but only after they reach a certain level of proficiency in that language

Good.

ntnguyenanh...a solid foundation in a language
ntnguyenanh...to broaden their knowledge --> which word I should use as a replacement of knowledge? (I used the words knowledge many times above)

understanding, appreciation, awareness (again with some modification of the context).

ntnguyenanh...learning the language itself should still be the first priority

good.