topic: the charts below show the results of an international survey carried out in New Zealand in 2004.

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A survey was conducted in 2004 asking international students in New Zealand where they live and how satisfied they were with their accommodations, rating from 1 to 5. The pie chart shows the results for the first question and the horizontal bar chart for the second. The accommodations are grouped into six categories: rented house, homestay, own homes, student hostel/ dormitory, relative homes, and the others.

Overall, nearly all stayed in either a rental habitation or a homestay, and these two are almost equally common. The levels of satisfaction did not vary much over these accommodations, with the relative home getting the highest rate.

In detail, approximately four out of ten students lived in rented houses (43%), ten times more than those picking their relative homes; the less common choice received the highest rate of satisfaction, whereas the other one was the four largest, 3.82 versus 3.35. Compared to rental places, the number of those picking a homestay was similar, 42%, but it made these people feel more pleased, with a rate of 3.6. The student hostel, with the lowest satisfaction rate of 3.14, was the third most common selection for living, with 7% choosing this. The participants all felt satisfied with the place they lived, with the rates staying in a narrow range between 3.14 and 3.62.

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The pie chart shows the percentages of international students in New Zealand in 2004, who stayed in either rental accommodation, homestay, their own home, a student hostel, with relatives, or in some other type of accommodation. The associated bar graph compares those accommodation types in terms of student satisfaction rating (on a scale of 1-5).

From the chart, it is clear that rental accommodation and homestay were the dominant types, at around 40% each. Student hostels were in third place at …

As for international students’ satisfaction with their accommodation arrangements, staying with relatives scored the highest rating at 3.82 ...

The pie chart shows the percentages of international students in New Zealand in 2004, who stayed in either rental accommodation, homestay, their own home, a student hostel, with relatives, or in some other type of accommodation. The associated bar graph compares those accommodation types in terms of student satisfaction rating (on a scale of 1-5).

Overall, nearly all stayed in either a rental habitation or a homestay, and these two are almost equally common. The levels of satisfaction did not vary much over these accommodations.

From the chart, it is clear that rental accommodation and homestay were the dominant types, at around 40% each. Student hostels were in third place at 7%, equal to the percentages of the other two named categories combined, with 3% living in their own homes and 4% in relative homes.

As for international students’ satisfaction with their accommodation arrangements, staying with relatives scored the highest rating at 3.82. Second and third places, students’ own houses (3.68) and homestay (3.6), respectively, received similar rates. The next highest category was rental accommodation, at 3.35. The levels for the other two did not go under 3.

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The pie chart shows the percentages of international students in New Zealand in 2004, who stayed in either rental accommodation, homestay, their own home, a student hostel, with relatives, or in some other type of accommodation. The associated bar graph compares those accommodation types in terms of student satisfaction rating (on a scale of 1-5).

Overall, nearly all stayed in either a rental habitation places or a homestay, and these two are almost equal in the chart. ly common. The levels of satisfaction did not vary much over between these [ 1] accommodation types.

From the chart, it is clear that rental accommodation and homestay were the dominant types, at around 40% each. Student hostels were in third place at 7%, equal to the percentages of the other two named categories combined, with 3% those living in their own homes (3%) and 4% those in relatives’ homes (4%) combined.

As for international students’ satisfaction with their accommodation arrangements, staying with relatives scored the highest rating at 3.82. Second and third places went to students in their own homes [ 2] houses (3.68) and homestay (3.6), respectively. , received similar rates. The next highest category After that, was rental accommodation, at 3.35. The levels for the other two did not go under 3.

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[ 1]: Use “accommodation” only as an uncountable noun.

[ 2]: A house is a type of building; home is where someone lives.

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