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The chart illustrates changes in the number of immigration, emigration and net migration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.


Overall, it can be clearly seen that there was an upward trend in the number of international migration in the UK over the 10-year period. Besides, the number of migration increased considerably after 2003.


According to the chart, although there were minor fluctuations in the number of international immigration and emigration, it went up between 1999 and 2008. To be more specific, the figure for immigration rose from about 450000 in 1999 to nearly 600000 in 2008, and it peaked at 600000 in the year 2006. With regard to the figure for emigration, there were 300000 people emigrated from the UK in 1999 and over 400000 people left the UK in the last year of the period.


At the same time, the net migration figure remained stable from the first five years (1999~2003), around 150000. By contrast, more and more people migrated from the UK after 2003, the number of people migrating reached the highest point in the year 2004.

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The chart (not precise enough, incorrect label) illustrates (poor word choice, an illustration is a drawing) changes in the number of immigration, emigration and net migration (wrong expression) in the UK from 1999 to 2008.


Model opening paragraph:

The figure, consisting of a line graph and bar chart, gives data on migration for the UK between 1999 and 2008. The line graph plots the numbers of immigrants and emigrants in thousands, and the bar chart shows the net migration of people totalled for each year.


Overall, it can be clearly seen that (These words are superfluous. They do not describe the data. Words like "clear, apparent, evident, noticeable" are more like opinion words. Avoid writing opinions in Task 1. Just describe the data.) there was an upward trend in the number of international migration (incorrect expression. The chart is counting people. Migration is an abstract noun. We do not count migration.) in the UK over the 10-year period. Besides, the number of migration increased considerably after 2003.


Model "overview" paragraph:

Overall, there was an increase in the numbers of people coming into and leaving the country during this period. For every year, the net migration was into the country, with an average of about 125,000 people. The largest net migration was in 2004, when 250,000 more people entered than left the country.



According to the chart, although there were minor fluctuations in the number of international immigration and emigration, it went up between 1999 and 2008. To be more specific, the figure (?? The figure is the entire diagram.) for immigration rose from about 450000 in 1999 to nearly 600000 in 2008, and it peaked at 600000 in the year 2006. With regard to the figure (??) for emigration, there were 300000 people (missing word) emigrated from the UK in 1999 and over 400000 people left the UK in the last year of the period.


At the same time,The net migration figure (??) varied within a small range, between 150 and 180 thousand, for remained stable from the first five years (1999~2003), around 150000. By contrast, more and more people migrated from the UK after 2003, the number of people migrating reached the highest point in the year 2004. (incorrect -The year with the greatest number of people migrating was 2008 when more than a million people migrated either into or out of the country. The second highest is 2006, when a million people migrated.)

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