Question: The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2020 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


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My report:

The chart compares the number of trips made by children aged from 5 to 12 in one country in the year 1990 and 2010 when commuting to school using five transport methods: car, walking, cycling, walking and bus, and bus.


Overall, while the number of trips on car increased, the opposite was true of the other means of transport.


In 1990, walking was the most popular method as there were more than 12 million trips to school, followed by bus with approximately 7 million trips were made. The numbers of trips made by students cycling, walking and using bus were around 6 million, whereas that of car was only just above 4 million.


In 2010, the number of walking trips dropped dramatically by half to 6 million. Similarly, the number of walking and using bus trips went down by half to about 3 million, and that of cycling fell by 3 times to 2 million. Meanwhile, the number of trips by bus declined slightly to around 5 million. In contrast, the number of trips on car soared to 11 million.


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The (What kind of chart?) chart compares the number of trips made by children aged from 5 to 12 in one country in the year (only one year?) 1990 and 2010 when commuting to school using five transport methods: car, walking, cycling, a combination of walking and bus, and bus.

Overall, while the number of trips by on car increased, the opposite was true of the other means of transport.

In 1990, walking was the most popular method as there were with more than 12 million trips to school, followed by bus with approximately 7 million trips were made. The numbers of trips made by students cycling, both walking and using bus were around 6 million, whereas trips by that of car were was only just above 4 million.

By 2010, the number of walking trips had dropped dramatically by half to 6 million. Similarly, the number of combined walking and using bus trips also went down by half to about 3 million, and that of cycling trips fell by a factor of three 3 times to 2 million. Meanwhile, the number of trips by bus declined slightly to around 5 million. In contrast, the number of trips on car nearly tripled soared to 11 million. (Do not use emotive language in a Task 1 report. Be objective and mathematical.)

Hi AlpheccaStars, thank you for your corrections. They are very helpful for me to improve my writing.

I have a question regarding this part:

By 2010, the number of walking trips had dropped dramatically by half to 6 million. Similarly, the number of combined walking and using bus trips also went down by half to about 3 million, and that of cycling trips fell by a factor of three 3times to 2 million. Meanwhile, the number of trips by bus declined slightly to around 5 million. In contrast, the number of trips on car nearly tripledsoared to 11 million. (Do not use emotive language in a Task 1 report. Be objective and mathematical.)

I noticed that you used the word "By 2010" in the beginning of the paragraph and changed the verb to past perfect tense. I'm wondering if we need to do this to all of the verbs in this paragraph as well?

Like this is what I re-wrote:

"By 2010, the number of walking trips had dropped by half to 6 million. Similarly, the number of combined walking and bus trips had gone down by half to 3 million, and cycling trips had fallen by a factor of three to 2 million. Meanwhile, the number of trips by bus had declined slightly to around 5 million. In contrast, the number of trips by car had nearly tripled to 11 million."


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Truc



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Ms.Truc HoI'm wondering if we need to do this to all of the verbs in this paragraph as well?

You can, but native speakers would likely use the simple past after the first sentence.

"By 2010" shows that something happened before 2010, not in that particular year. The past perfect is used with the "by-time" phrase.

The issue is the verb "drop." Compare these three statements:

In 2010, the number of walking trips dropped to six million. (The action of "drop" happened in the year 2010.)

In 2010, the number of walking trips was six million, half of the 1990 value. (This says nothing about when the drop occurred. It simply gives the value at that time.)

By 2010, the number of walking trips had dropped to six million. (The action of "drop" happened before the 2010 data was collected. )


In the following sentences, it is ok to use simple past. The reader knows the temporal condition established in the first sentence. Stylistically, it is better.

Please evaluate my writing. I will be really grateful.


More and More students are choosing to study at college and university in a foreign country.

Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?


These days study in abroad is very popular among students especially those who seek higher education opportunities. A large number of students try to enroll at graduate school and higher secondary school out of the country. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons, and I will provide my opinion.


One the one hand, many students who travel abroad to persuade post-graduation and Ph.D. degree. This is because sometimes foreign universities offer considerable opportunities including fully-funded scholarships and living costs. This may help them to continue study. In Bangladesh, For example, many higher education opportunity seekers want to do research in foreign universities because they provide adequate components related to research interest which may not be available if they stay in Bangladesh. Moreover, a study in a foreign country often gives a better lifestyle. Mainly in developed countries after completing study students get offered to have desire job. Finally, it is a wonderful way to know other cultures, lifestyles and meet new people.

On the other hand, students can suffer from language barriers in foreign nations. The reason for this is that although the majority of students study in English as it is not their mother tongue it can be difficult to study topics occasionally. Secondly, staying far from home for a long time can be a difficult task. Because it may cause to break up the relationship with closest one.

To sum up, studying outside of the country has more benefits than drawbacks. In my point of view is that it creates opportunities to have world-class education as well as utilizing all the resources to research.

zany cpu 616Please evaluate my writing. I will be really grateful.

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