Question: The graphs below show a comparison of the weekly expenses in the UK and the US, in 2010


Answer:

The pie chart illustrates the expenditure proportion of the six main cost types in America and Britain in 2010. Overall, expense of housing and food were the primary parts of the weekly expenses in both of the countries.

In United Kingdom, the percentage of rent expenses was 30% and the expenses of food accounted for 18%. However, DVDs and Books were expended the least popularly with 10% and 12% respectively. The expense proportion of traveling was as much as that of transport, which was 15%.

Turning to the United State, the highest proportion of the weekly expenses was food with 25% while it was accommodation costs in the UK. The cost of rent in America accounted for 20%, which was the second highest percentage. Going out for entertainment, books and transport expenses had the same percentage with 15%. Similar to Britain, DVDs was the most uncommon expenses in the US with 10%.

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The pie chart (There is more than one of these!) illustrates (wrong word) the expenditure proportion of the six main cost types categories of expenses. in America and Britain in 2010. (Your paragraph is incomplete. What are the six expense categories? Is this dail, weekly, monthly or yearly expenses?)

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Overall, expense of housing and food costs were the largest categories; making up just less than half of the total were the primary parts of the weekly expenses in both of the countries.
This sentence is best in Paragraph #2, not in Paragraph #1. Paragraph #2 should have two or three significant observations.

In the United Kingdom, the percentage of rent expenses was 30% and the expenses of food accounted for 18%. However, DVDs and Books were expended the least popularly (wrong word) with 10% and 12% respectively. The expense proportion of traveling was as much as that of transport, which was 15%.

Turning to the United State, the highest proportion of the weekly expenses was food with 25%, in contrast with rent while it was accommodation costs in the UK. The cost of rent in America accounted for 20%, which was the second highest percentage. Going out for entertainment, books and transport expenses had the same percentage with 15%. Similar to Britain, DVDs was the lowest expense category most uncommon expenses in the US with 10%.

The two pie charts give information about the percentage of expenses done weekly on rent,food, transport,books ,DVDs and going out by British and American.