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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.


The past 50 years have seen a considerable decrease in the number of languages all around world. Some people believe that it is not necessary because fewer languages will make life become easier. However, I would argue that its drawbacks outweigh benefits. The reasons for this are as follows

Firstly, many uncovered parts of history are not deciphered without the maintenance of the world’ s languages. It is an irrefutable fact that traditional myths and cultures are written or documented in the minority language. It is, therefore, important to observe languages which are on the verge of disappearance for the sake of human exploration and science. For instance, scientists exploring some fossils in one area, they have to use vernacular languages to request help from local people.

Secondly and more importantly, though, the inexistence of some languages would destroy the social relationship. As an inevitable change of life, people of the tribe have been accepting international languages with a view to developing their education and lifestyles. In many cases, affecting remarkedly from languages from other nations, people would be adapted to be a part of new society. This integration might weaken the interaction between humans in the former society.

By way of conclusion, I believe that this issue is likely to become even more significant in the future as the number of languages in the world keeps declining. Thus, it demands out futher consideration.

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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The past 50 (Use written-out numbers in academic writing. e,g, The past fifty years...) years have seen a considerable decrease in the number of languages all around (missing word) world. Some people believe that it is not necessary (wrong word) because fewer languages will make life become easier. However, I would argue that its drawbacks outweigh (missing word) benefits. The reasons for this are as follows (It is not acceptable in an academic essay to refer to your writing in your thesis statement.)

Firstly, First, (use "first, second, third, fourth" for enumerations) many uncovered (wrong word) parts of history are not deciphered (wrong word) without the maintenance (wrong phrasing) of the world’ s languages. It is an irrefutable fact that

(Be extremely careful of making such absolute claims in essays. In this case, you are wrong, the languages or dialects that are in danger of extinction have no writing system. They are spoken only. They die when their last native speaker dies of old age. The relatives of this person (and that person themselves) have abandoned the old language and speak the majority language. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_last_known_speakers_of_languages )

traditional myths and cultures are written or documented in the minority (??) language. It is, therefore, important to observe languages which are on the verge of disappearance for the sake of human exploration and science. For instance, scientists exploring some fossils in one area, they (ungrammatical) have to use the vernacular languages to request help from the local people. (That is not a good example. The language named Mesmes became extinct when its last speaker, a man named Abegaz, died in Ethiopia around the year 2000. Since there was only one old man that spoke this language, it would be of no use to any exploring scientists to be able to speak it. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_languages_by_time_of_extinction The language Eyak became extinct when 89-year old Marie Smith Jones died on January 21, 2008 in Alaska. She was the last native speaker. All Alaskans speak English.)

Secondly Second and more importantly, though, the inexistence of some languages would destroy the social relationship. (Which one?) As an inevitable change of life, people of the tribe (Which tribe are you writing about?) have been accepting international languages with a view to developing their education and lifestyles. In many cases, affecting remarkedly (wrong usage) from languages from other nations, (wrong usage) people would be adapted to be a part of new society. This integration might weaken the interaction between humans (wrong word) in the former society.

By way of conclusion, I believe that this issue is likely to become even more significant in the future as the number of languages in the world keeps declining. Thus, it demands out futher consideration.