I really want to make my essay shorter but this template doesn't allow me to do so.

5) Society is based on rules and laws, it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this day and age, because of the rapid human civilization, the authority’s administration is crucial to the peaceful and independent state of a nation. Consequently, legislations are required to operate the community properly. However, there is a school of thought avers that human freedom is of greater significance than rules and regulations for some rationales. My firm conviction is that, without an official set of laws, the country can experience an acute crisis.

First, proponents of a society anarchical society hold that human freedom has to take priority over other restrictions. These individuals assert that people are permitted to be engaged in their solely wanted pursuits regardless of their unethical aspects. Moreover, they also contend that rules and laws are depriving of human rights as they are increasingly severe and abused. Therefore, many political protests have been stormed to demand for their freedom.

Nonetheless, I affirm that these justifications are unsubstantiated as human rights have to be limited lest the society suffers from widespread injustice. Furthermore, legislations are claimed to plays a pivotal role in the operation of a nation as well as its development. Moreover, a non-hierarchical world is synonymous with the highlight of individual expression. It is claimed to be one of those stages to diminish the injustices done to minorities, animals, and the environment due to false enforcement of the policy. Even now, when the government is striving to handle the issues by implementing several restrictions, the deterioration of forests are continuing.

Additionally, on the individual level, I believe that rules and regulations can also facilitate a better and improved life. As in the past, prior to the time when rules and laws take pride of place, social crimes and issues are common and unstoppable. Nevertheless, when the authority imposes strict punishment for those convicting serious or illegal crimes, the state of the world is balanced and more stable. People are assured of safety and protected by justice.

In conclusion, regardless of the importance of human rights, I aver that they should be limited to some extent. Laws and regulations should be strictly implemented to secure safety for the marginalized.

1 2
HongNhatTanI really want to make my essay shorter but this template doesn't allow me to do so.

I do not understand. A template is like a form. You do not have to fill it completely.

To make your essay shorter, delete some of the less important argument points.

HongNhatTan5) Society is based on rules and laws, it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The sentence is not grammatical. It has a comma splice error.

Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?

There are many errors in the first paragraph. You are trying too hard, so you use awkward collocations and make mistakes in the grammar. Trying to write at too advanced a level for their understanding is the number one mistake that many essay writers make.



In this day and age, because of the rapid human civilization, (That does not make sense.) the authority’s administration (not a good collocation) is crucial to the peaceful and independent state of a nation. Consequently, legislations (legislation is non-count.) are required to operate the community properly. However, there is a school of thought avers (ungrammatical - You have named the "school of thought" to be "avers" ) that human freedom is of greater significance than rules and regulations for some rationales. (??) My firm conviction is that, without an official set of laws, the country can experience an acute crisis.

HongNhatTan To what extent do you agree or disagree?

That is the question you must base your thesis on.
You need to include an adverb of extent. There is no adverb of extent in your sentence.

In this day and age, a set of national regulations is crucial to the peaceful and independent state of a society. Consequently, legislation are required to operate the community properly. However, a plurality of individuals aver that human freedom is of greater significance than rules and regulations. I totally disagree with this viewpoint because the country could experience an acute crisis if there were no laws.

Is it better ?

HongNhatTanIs it better ?

A little bit.

In this day and age, (Actually, primitive tribes and social primates such as baboons and monkeys have laws. There is evidence for laws in ancient civilizations. So this time phrase is not relevant.) a set of national regulations is crucial to the to ensure a peaceful and independent state of a ( That does not apply.) society. Consequently, legislation is are required to operate the community properly. (That is not natural. We operate a company, but not a community.) However, a plurality of (I doubt that most everyone wants anarchy...) some individuals insist on complete aver that human freedom of action, claiming that it is of greater significance than rules and regulations. I totally disagree with this viewpoint because the country could experience an acute crisis if there were no laws.



This is a kind of opening that I would write.

Every country has a legislature to enact laws and a judicial system to enforce them. Without a robust legal system, the society would have no way to settle disputes among individuals and corporations. Without guidance on what is proper conduct, violence and anarchy would prevail, and the strongest would dominate the weaker members of the community. So I completely agree that everyone must abide by the country's laws, and if they do not like a particular law, they can petition their representatives to change it.

Teachers: We supply a list of EFL job vacancies

How about the rest of my essay? I believe that there are many mistakes that only you can help me.

HongNhatTanHow about the rest of my essay?

You need to shorten it anyway to a total of about 270 words. Revise your essay and post a new version. It will be good practice for you.

OK

I will repost it with a shorter version.

Site Hint: Check out our list of pronunciation videos.
Show more