The bar chart compares how many jobs there were in a UK city in three industries related to tourism from 1989 to 2009.

Overall, it is clear that there were more jobs in restaurants and hotels than in the other categories throughout the period. There was a declining trend over the period in the number of jobs in travel and tourism.

In the restaurant and hotel industry, the number of jobs increased from 1100 in 1989 to reach a peak of 1600 in 2004. Numbers then fell slightly to 1580 in 2009. In contrast, the number of jobs in sport and leisure remained fairly constant. From a figure of 800 in 1989, the jobs total fluctuated slightly around this number, before falling to 700 at the end of the period. Finally, the figure for jobs in travel and tourism rose from 780 to 830 from 1989 to 1994. However, this number declined to 630 and then 600 in 1999 and 2004, respectively. By 2009, the number of jobs in this sector had decreased to just 400.

The bar chart compares how many jobs there were in a UK city in three industries related to tourism from 1989 to 2009. (incomplete. What are the three industries? How frequent are the bars, or what is the time period between them? )

Overall, it is clear that (Avoid the "opinion words - "clear, evident, noticeable and apparent" in Task 1.) there were more jobs in restaurants and hotels than in the other categories (The reader has no idea what these categories are. You have not told us.) throughout the period. There was a declining trend over the period in the number of jobs in travel and tourism.

In the restaurant and hotel industry, the number of jobs increased from 1100 in 1989 to reach a peak of 1600 in 2004. Numbers then fell slightly to 1580 in 2009. In contrast, the number of jobs in sport and leisure remained fairly constant. From a figure of 800 in 1989, the number of jobs stayed within a narrow range (plus or minus 20) total fluctuated slightly around this number, before falling to 700 at the end of the period. Finally, those / the ones the figure for jobs in travel and tourism rose from 780 to 830 from 1989 to 1994. However, this number declined to 630 and then 600 in 1999 and 2004, respectively. By 2009, the number of jobs in this sector had decreased to just 400.


Vocabulary"

1. Figure. In a science/ math formal context, a figure is a diagram inserted into the text. Avoid "figure" to mean a data value.

2. Fluctuation. Fluctuation is seen on line graphs, not in tables or bar graphs with just a few data points. It is a variation around a trend line. Fluctuations can be random or cyclical. Use "vary/variation" otherwise.



The bar chart illustrates the total amount of employment in terms of three industries related to tourism in a city in the UK over a 20-year period from 1989 to 2009 with the data measured in the number of jobs.

Overall, the figure for restaurants or hotels remained at a higher rate with the trend experiencing an upward trend throughout the period whereas travel and tourism made up the least significant part of the chart. Another interesting point is that the most noticeable disparity between the three categories can be found in the year 2009.

First and foremost, regarding restaurants and hotels, the job vacancies stood at 1100 while it later soared up to 1300 in 1994 prior to reaching a climax of 1600 until 1990. However, the trend for sport and leisure related jobs contributed the second most employment to the tourism industry of the city in which it fluctuated around 800 from 1989 to 1999 while the number of jobs declined slightly to reach under 800, which was around two times lower than that of aforementioned category.

Next, travel and tourism had the lowest figure compared with other groups. One fascinating fact is that this trend and the figure of sport and leisure had common in the fact that they both were equal in 1989 and 1994, accounting for approximately 800 jobs. In stark contrast, although by 2004, the jobs required in travel and tourism had slashed gradually to reach 600, there was over three times less employment in this category than the very first category at the end of the period.

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