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The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar graphs illustrate the percentage of males and females of varied ages watching reality shows and game shows in Australia.

From both of the charts, it is readily apparent that reality shows are more favorable among women, while the same cannot be said for game programs. Simultaneously, both the two programs draw equal attention from people above 45 years old.

With regards to reality programs, there is an enormous discrepancy of 34% between men and women. The shows are most popular among people aged 45 or older, being just under 69%. Next come the 35-44 and 25-34 groups, with 65% and 60% in turn. Although half of the youngest group opt for this form of entertainment, they make up the smallest portion compared to the others.

Conversely, the number of males watching game shows exceed that of their female counterparts, although with a modest disparity of 2%. The figure for the 45+ group being 70% nearly doubles that for the 25-34 group. These programs are less favored by adults from 35 to 44, with around 38% as opposed to 50% of the respondents aged between 16 and 24.


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The given bar charts illustrate the percentages of males and females of varied various ages brackets watching in Australia who watch reality TV shows and of those who watch game shows. in Australia.

From both charts, It is evident from the charts that reality TV shows are more favored by women, while the same cannot be said for game shows programs attract similar levels of males and females. It is also noticeable that two both kinds of shows draw equal attention from people above 45 years old.

With regard to reality TV programs, the number of female viewers of almost 70% outstrips that of their male counterparts by 34%. These shows are most popular among people aged 45 or older, with nearly 69% choosing them. Around 65% of the 35-44 group and 60% of the 25-34 age bracket see the attraction of are fans of reality TV shows. Much as the youngest viewers opt for this form of entertainment, they In contrast, only 50% of younger viewers watch these programs. make up the smallest proportion compared to the others, at 50%.

Conversely, the percentage of Australian men watching who watch game shows exceeds that of women, although with a modest disparity of 2%. The proportion of fans in the 45+ group, 70%, is almost doubles double that of the 25-to-34-year-old group. These programs are less favored by adults from aged between 35 to and 44, with around 38% viewership in that age group people watching as opposed to 50% of those aged between 16 and 24.

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Thanks for your reminder.

First, I did attach the image to my post but maybe I didn't press the OK button so it didn't appear.

Second, regarding the article titled IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips, And Advice , I find some information clashed with what I have learned. For example, the well-known IELTS examiner Simon still used the phrase "It is clear/noticeable/apparent/obvious that ____" in his sample answers while the post recommended not to do so.

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TASK 1 - BAR CHART - #01

The charts give information about two genres of TV programs watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.


The given bar charts illustrate the percentages of males and females of varied age brackets watching reality shows and game shows in Australia.

From both charts, reality shows are more favored by women, while the same cannot be said for game programs. It is also noticeable that two kinds of shows draw equal attention from people above 45 years old.

With regard to reality programs, the number of female viewers outstrips that of their male counterparts by 34%. These shows are most popular among people aged 45 or older, with nearly 69% choosing them. Around 65% of the 35-44 group and 60% of the 25-34 age bracket see the attraction of reality shows. Much as the youngest viewers opt for this form of entertainment, they make up the smallest proportion compared to the others, at 50%.

Conversely, the percentage of Australian men watching game shows exceeds that of women, although with a modest disparity of 2%. The proportion of the 45+ group, 70%, almost doubles that of the 25-to-34-year-old group. These programs are less favored by adults from 35 to 44, with around 38% people watching as opposed to 50% of those aged between 16 and 24.

Word count: 197 words


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Selie Dang For example, the well-known IELTS examiner Simon still used the phrase "It is clear/noticeable/apparent/obvious that ____"

That is right. The clause "it is clear..." is grammatically correct. However, as it conveys very little content, it does serve to increase your word count, but not much more.

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