It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

There is no doubt that the number of aged citizens is significantly surging in many parts of the world, and this is expected to continue in the future. While some believe that such a tendency has certain merits, I hold the opinion that this trend is largely negative.
On the one hand, a mounting number of elderly people may bring several benefits. First of all, older people can give useful advice to the young generation as they have more experience in life and work. In addition, compared with youngsters, retirees are more financially comfortable and find pleasure in voluntary work for the sake of the whole society. To illustrate, a sheer number of people after retirement participate in charity organizations to provide free education for deprived children and clean the environment.
On the other hand, opponents of this trend argue that the aging population has more far-reaching and detrimental impacts on society. The foremost is that aged people are unable to keep contributing to the economy’s development as their health problems. Therefore, they usually rely on social welfare under a form of pension. Furthermore, governments are likely to allocate more funds for the health system to meet the growing demand for medical treatment, which bears a burden on the national budget. As well as this, the number of older people surge rapidly, which means that there is a shrinking number of young people at working age. This gives rise to labor shortage, having negative impacts on the development of a nation.
In conclusion, all things considered, although the trend has some merits, I believe that its demerits are much more significant as it hinders further socio-economic enhancement programs.

There is no doubt that (unnecessary verbiage) the number of aged citizens is significantly surging (unnatural, wrong vocabulary) in many parts of the world, and this is expected to continue in the future.

Populations of many nations are aging because people, on average, are living longer. It means that the number of people over 65 is increasing relative to the number of people between 16 and 30.

While some believe that such a tendency has certain merits, I hold the opinion that this trend is largely negative.


On the one hand, a mounting number of elderly people may bring several benefits. First of all, older people can give useful advice to the young generation as they have more experience in life and work. In addition, compared with youngsters, (A youngster is a child aged 6-12. They are living at home and attending school. Is that the comparison you want to make?) retirees are more financially comfortable and find pleasure in voluntary work for the sake of the whole society. To illustrate, (wrong phrase) a sheer (wrong word - substantial) number of people after retirement participate in charity organizations to provide free education for deprived children and clean the environment. (wrong word) streets. (Do old people pick up trash in the parks and streets?)


On the other hand, opponents of this trend argue that the aging population has more far-reaching and detrimental impacts on society. The foremost is that aged people are unable to keep contributing to the economy’s development as (wrong word) their health problems. Therefore, they usually rely on social welfare under a form of or a government pension. Furthermore, governments are likely to allocate more funds for to the health system to meet the growing demand for medical treatment, which bears a burden on the national budget. As well as this, the number of older people surge (wrong word ) rapidly, which means that there is a shrinking number of (The overall population can be growing in size. The numbers of working-age people are not decreasing. It is the proportion that is changing.) are relatively fewer young people at of working age. This gives rise to labor shortage, having negative impacts on the development of a nation.
In conclusion, all things considered, although the trend has some merits, I believe that its demerits are much more significant as it hinders further socio-economic enhancement programs. (wrong phrase)

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