The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

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The line graph compares the number of cases between three different types of crime in Newport City center: burglary, car theft, and robbery from the year 2003 to 2012.

Overall, there was a difference in the ranking of burglary and car theft between 2003 and 2012 since the rate of burglary decreased significantly. However, the quantity of stolen cars and robbery incidents did not change.

In 2003, the cases of burglary were the highest, at around 3400 compared to the car theft (at about 2800), and the robbery (at 600 approximately).

The theft from the person incidents, despite being fluctuated during those nine years, ended up with the same figure as in 2003 in 2012. On the other hand, although the rate of burglary in Newport City center rose to nearly 3800 cases in 2004, it then went down steadily for four years later before remaining in the scope between about 1400 and 1500 from 2009 to 2012. Moreover, there there was the same pattern in the number of car being stolen between the first and last recorded years, standing at around 2700 after reaching its bottom at 2000 incidents in 2006 and surpassing the figure for burglary in the following years.

The line graph compares the numbers of cases between three different types of crime in Newport City center: burglary, car theft, and robbery committed between from the year 2003 to and 2012.

Overall, there was a [ 1] difference in the ranking of burglary and car theft between 2003 and 2012 since the rate of burglary decreased significantly. However, the quantity of stolen cars and robbery incidents did not change. [ 2]

In 2003, the cases of burglary were the highest, at around 3,400 compared to the car thefts (at about 2,800), and the robberies (at 600 approximately).

The theft from the person [ 3] incidents, despite [ 4] being fluctuated during those nine years, ended up with the same figure as in 2003 in 2012. On the other hand, although the rate of burglary in Newport city center rose to nearly 3,800 cases in 2004, it then went down steadily for the subsequent four years later before [ 5] remaining in the scope between about 1,400 and 1,500 from 2009 to 2012. Moreover, there there was the same pattern in the number of cars being stolen [ 6] between the first and last recorded years, standing at around 2,700 [ 7] after reaching its bottom at of 2,000 incidents in 2006 and surpassing the figure for burglary in the following years. [ 8]

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[ 1]: That’s unnatural and meaningless. Look at each one individually.

[ 2]: That suggests a horizontal line graph! It’s not true.

[ 3]: I know that’s written in the diagram, and it’s not your fault, but it’s unnatural. Just use “incidents of robbery” or “robberies” instead.

[ 4]: That’s ungrammatical. Search on Google Images for “fluctuations”, and you’ll see why that word is inappropriate here.

[ 5]: That’s unnatural and meaningless.

[ 6]: That’s vague. Change it.

[ 7]: When?

[ 8]: That’s confusing and doesn’t appear to be related.

Revise your text and repost it below if you wish.

Hà Trần 8023 being fluctuated

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Fluctuation is described in the second link. It means that the data values go above and below a trend line. There must be many up-down cycles to be called "fluctuation." There must be a trend line. The trend can be upwards, downwards, curved, or flat. Fluctuations are sometimes called "noise" in the data. Here are several examples.


Here are graphs with fluctuations:

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I rewrote my essay, please check it for me. Thank you!!!

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The line graph compares the numbers of three different types of crime in Newport City center: burglary, car theft, and robbery committed between 2003 and 2012.

Overall, the highest-ranking in the rate of crimes, burglary, in 2003 was replaced by car theft in 2012 since the rate of burglary decreased significantly. However, the quantity of stolen cars and robbery incidents in 2012 was the same as in 2003.

In 2003, the cases of burglary were the highest, at around 3,400 compared to car thefts (at about 2,800), and robberies (at 600 approximately).

The incidents of robbery, despite being up and down during those nine years, ended up with the same figure as in 2003 in 2012. On the other hand, although the rate of burglary in Newport City center rose to nearly 3,800 cases in 2004, it then went down steadily to about 1,250 before staying at 1,400 approximately in 2012. Moreover, there was the same pattern in the number of cars stolen between 2003 and 2012, standing at around 2,700, in spite of reaching its bottom of 2,000 incidents in 2006.


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1. How could you describe the trend of the robbery line, since I saw there are many ups and downs in this line?

2. Is the line of car theft from 2003 to 2005 a horizontal line?

3. I had a new diagram here. Can you check my grammar spelling for me, please? Thank you!

https://www.englishforums.com/English/IeltsTaskCheckGrammar/bpgbrb/post.htm

Can other graphs, such as bar graphs and pie charts, use the word 'fluctuation'?

Hà Trần 8023Can other graphs, such as bar graphs and pie charts, use the word 'fluctuation'?

No. There are not enough data points to show a trend line and variations above and below it.

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Hà Trần 80231. How could you describe the trend of the robbery line, since I saw there are many ups and downs in this line?
  1. The number of robberies showed no particular trend, with the numbers varying between 500 and 900.
  2. The number of robberies averaged around 700, with a maximum of 900 in 2005 and a minimum of 500 in 2008.
  3. The number of robberies were relatively consistent, with the numbers varying between 500 and 900.
  4. The curve representing the number of robberies was relatively flat during the period, just above 500 in the best years and slightly below 900 in the worst.
  5. In contrast, robberies showed relatively little change over the period, beginning and ending at about 700.
Hà Trần 80232. Is the line of car theft from 2003 to 2005 a horizontal line?

No. The numbers are slightly different.

  1. There was little change in numbers of car thefts in the first three years.
  2. The number of car thefts in 2003, 2004 and 2005 was nearly constant at about 2800.
  3. The curve representing car thefts was nearly flat for the first three years.

The line graph compares the numbers of three different types of crime in Newport City center: burglary, car theft, and robbery committed between 2003 and 2012.

Overall, the highest-ranking in the rate of crimes, (Rank is not good here. Rank is associated with something that is popular or positive. e..g. The highest-ranking TV show in 1985 was "Cheers". ) burglary, with the highest crime rate in 2003, was replaced by car theft in 2012 since the numbers of burglaries rate of burglary decreased significantly. However, the quantity (wrong word) of stolen cars and robbery incidents in 2012 was the same as in 2003.


In 2003, the cases of burglary were the highest, at around 3,400 compared to car thefts (at about 2,800), and robberies (at 600 approximately). (No new paragraph)

The incidents of robbery, despite being up and down during those nine years, ended up with the same figure value as in 2003 in 2012. On the other hand, although the rate of burglaries in Newport City center (This is repetitive. The reader knows where the data is from.) rose to nearly 3,800 cases in 2004, it then went down steadily to about 1,250 before ending staying at approximately 1,400 approximately in 2012. Moreover, there was the same pattern in the number of cars stolen between 2003 and 2012, standing at around 2,700, in spite of reaching its lowest level / point / value bottom of 2,000 incidents in 2006.


This example essay is too long, but will give you some ideas of vocabulary and sentence structure.

Paragraph 1: Describe the graphic in the task.
Paragraph 2: Pick out the main features. There should be 2 or 3.

If you want a really good score, group categories together. Use basic math skills that you learned in primary school: addition, subtraction, percentages and ratios.

Paragraph 3: Make comparisons and describe some interesting details.

The line graph compares the numbers of three different types of crime committed in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012, burglary, car theft, and robbery.

Overall, only one of these measures of crime showed a marked change over this decade, burglaries. It was cut in half. The other two, although they declined between 2003 and 2008, they rose again to end up relatively unchanged over their initial values. The year with the lowest crime was 2004 where the total number of incidents was 3700. The worst year was 2004 with a total of around 7300.

In 2003, the burglary was the most frequently committed crime, with just under 3500 cases. It was followed by car theft, at about 2800. The measure with the lowest crime rate over the period was robbery, which, in 2003 had about one-fifth the incidents of burglaries, 700. From that point, it varied very little over the period, between a maximum of about 900 in 2005 and a minimum of 500 in 2008. In 2012, car theft was the highest, at the same value as in 2003. Between 2006 and 2007, the number of car thefts surpassed that of burglaries, and car thefts became the most frequently committed crime from 2007 through 2012. Even though the number of incidents had dropped from 2800 in 2003 to 2100 in 2006, it had a consistent trend upward from 2006 to 2012, rising to 2800.

The line graph compares the numbers of three different types of crime in Newport City center: burglary, car theft, and robbery committed between 2003 and 2012.

Overall, the highest-ranking in the rate of crimes, burglary, in 2003 was replaced by car theft in 2012 since the rate of burglary decreased significantly. However, the quantity of stolen cars and robbery incidents in 2012 was the same as in 2003.

At a glance, while the number of burglaries went down significantly over that 9-year period, those of car thefts and robberies did not change much.

In 2003, the cases of burglary were the highest, at around 3,400, compared to car thefts (at about 2,800), and robberies (at 600 approximately).

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Describe each line individually. Write a small paragraph about each line.

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