Essay question: People now have freedom to work and live anywhere in the work due to the development of communication technology and transportation.Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?


Today, thanks to the high-tech contacting and moving facilities' advancement, folks are allowed to work as well as live everywhere all over the world freely. Hence, I suppose that the drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits of that development.

On the one hand, it is obvious that the distance between people is made by technology. For example, a person is far away from home can use Skype or Facebook to his family, but he just can return once or twice a year. Moreover, using the Internet to maintain the contact causes less love and warmth than meeting face-to-face. In lieu of sending sweet messages and emojis, it is a lot more meaningful when we communicate directly, especially to express our feelings by kissing and hugging each other.

On the other hand, I argue that there are some upside that would be noticeable. One evident strength is that it would help us to travel, work, live and call our family whenever and anywhere we want to, so we can easily discover parts of the world, improve our languages and work in a proffesional environment. To illustrate, when people have an opportunity to work in developed countries such as America, China, England, Japan, it means that they have truly ability required for the jobs. Doubtlessly, those people will benefit from enhancing skills, getting knowledge that they had not learnt in their countries’ schools and having high salary futhermore. Of course, they can keep contact with their relatives through the Internet and come back home by convenient means of transport.

With respect to the positive aspects of the trend and living overseas, I believe that they outweigh the negative aspects on account of enrichment of knowledge and skills when we are there.

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Essay question: People now have freedom to work and live anywhere in the work (world?) due to the development of communication technology and transportation.Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?



Today, thanks to the high-tech contacting (wrong word) and moving facilities' advancement, (wrong expression - completely incomprehensible) folks are allowed to work as well as live everywhere (wrong word) all over the world freely. Hence, I suppose (That is not a definitive statement. It is like "I guess" It is not very good in an academic essay.) that the drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits of that development.

On the one hand, it is obvious that the distance between people is made by (wrong expression) technology. For example, a person is far away from home can use (ungrammatical clause structure ) Skype or Facebook to communicate with his family, but he just can return once or twice a year. Moreover, using the Internet to maintain the contact does not have the same causes less love and warmth as than meeting face-to-face. In lieu of sending sweet messages and emojis, it is a lot more meaningful when we communicate directly, especially to express our feelings by kissing and hugging each other.

On the other hand, I argue that there are some upside (wrong form) that would be noticeable. One evident strength is that it would help us to travel, work, live and call our family whenever and wherever anywhere we want to, so we can easily discover parts of the world, improve our language skills and work in a proffesional environment. To illustrate, (wrong expression) when people have an opportunity to work in developed countries such as America, China, England, Japan, (ungrammatical series) it means that they have the truly ability required for the jobs. Doubtlessly, those people will benefit from enhancing (wrong word) skills, getting knowledge that they had not learnt in their countries’ schools and having a high salary futhermore. Of course, they can keep contact with their relatives through the Internet and come back home by convenient means of transport.

With respect to the positive aspects of the trend and living overseas, I believe that they outweigh the negative aspects on account of enrichment of knowledge and skills that we gain when living away from home. when we are there.

Today, thanks to the high-tech facilities advancement, people are allowed to freely work as well as live anywhere in the world. Hence, I claim that the drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits of that development.

On the one hand, it is obvious that the distance between people is created by technology. For example, the person who is far away from home can use Skype or Facebook to his family, but he can pay a visit once or twice a year. Moreover, using the internet to maintain the contact does not have the same love and warmth as meeting face-to-face. In lieu of sending sweet messages and emojis, it is a lot more meaningful when we communicate directly, especially to express our feelings by intimate expressions.

On the other hand, I argue that there are some upsides that would be noticeable. one clear strength is that it would help us to travel, work, live and call our family whenever and wherever we want to, so we can easily discover parts of the world, improve our language skills and work in a professional environment ( Can you tell me why 'proffestional' isn't suitable to the essay? ) For instance, when people are recuited in a company in developed countries such as America, England, China, Japan, it means that they have the ability required for the jobs. Doubtlessly, those people will benefit from bettering skills, getting knowledge that they had not learnt in their countries’ schools and futhermore, having high salary ( Can you tell me why I should add 'a' behind 'salary'? As far as I know, 'salary' is uncountable ) Of course, they can keep contact with their relatives through the internet and come back home by convenient means of transport.

With respect to the positive aspects of the trend and living overseas, I believe that they outweigh the negative aspects on account of enrichment of knowledge and skills that we gain when we are far away frome home.

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when people are recuited in a company

sorry, this green word should be 'recruited'

And I've already understood that 'proffesional' is wrong. It should be 'professional'