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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1970 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.




The bar chart shows the percentage of females from five different countries who went for higher education after finishing school. The selected countries are the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan and Germany, and the data for the years 1970 and 2005 are given.


Canada had the largest percentage with 60% in both two years, while Japan had the 5th rank among the five countries in both 1970 (20%) and 2005 (40%). The USA ranked third in both of the years with 40% and about 58% for the years 1970 and 2005 respectively.


The percentage of women who continue studying for higher education increased in all countries between 1970 and 2005 except Canada which this proportion remained constant for these two years. Among countries with an increasing trend in the mentioned percentage, Japan had the maximum increase (by 100%) and Germany had the minimum rise in this context with just by 10% increase (50% in 1970 to 55% in 2005).


Overall, almost all countries experienced a growth in the percentage of women who went to college after high school except Canada which had no change in this matter.

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The bar chart shows the percentage of females from five different countries who went for higher education after finishing secondary school. The selected countries are the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan and Germany, and the data for the years 1970 and 2005 are given.

(The "overall observations" paragraph is better as the second paragraph.)

Overall, almost all countries experienced a growth in the percentage of women who went to college after high school except Canada which had no change in this matter.

Canada had the largest percentage with 60% in both two years, while Japan ranked lowest had the 5th rank among the five countries in both 1970 (20%) and 2005 (40%). The USA ranked third in both of the years with 40% and about 58% for the years 1970 and 2005 respectively.

The percentage of women who continue studying for higher education increased in all countries between 1970 and 2005 except Canada which this proportion remained constant for these two years. (This is repetitive. Avoid repetition) Among countries with an increasing trend (wrong word) in the mentioned percentage, Japan had the maximum increase (by 100%) and Germany had the minimum rise in this context with just a 10% increase (50% in 1970 to 55% in 2005).


Avoid repetition by reporting other comparisons and details:

e.g.

The rank order in 1970 was Canada, Germany, USA, the UK and Japan, with a significant difference of 40% between the lowest and highest ranking countries. Thirty-five years later, in 2005, the ordering was quite different. Canada and the UK were tied for the highest at 60%, followed by the US, Germany and Japan. The difference between the lowest and highest was half that of 1970 (20%) and the top four fell within a very narrow range, between 55 and 60%. Japan was the outlier in both years with a gap of about 20% less than the UK in 1970 and 15% less than Germany in 2005..


Overall, almost all countries experienced a growth in the percentage of women who went to college after high school except Canada which had no change in this matter.

Hi, dear alphecca

Should we give some new information in overall paragraph or not?

Thanks a lot

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Alireza MovahediShould we give some new information in overall paragraph or not?


A conclusion or summary paragraph comes at the end of an essay. In this paragraph, you only summarize the ideas in the body paragraphs. You give no new information.


Task 1 essays do not have a conclusion / summary paragraph.
Task 2 essays must have a conclusion paragraph.


General advice for Task 1 essays

1. Structure: This works for most Task 1 essays:

Paragraph 1: Describe the figure or table. What kind of figure is it? How many are there? What is the subject matter, the time frame, the geography, and the categories? What are the units of measure? Write about all aspects of the diagram, but do not mention any data or information that it contains.

Paragraph 2: "Overall" Write 2 or 3 sentences about the most significant observations in the data or information.

Paragraph 3: "Details" Write about some interesting details.

A summary paragraph is not needed.

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The bar chart shows the percentage of women who went to college after secondary school in the years 1970 and 2005. The data are given for five different countries which are the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan, and Germany.


Overall, the percentage increased for all countries between 1970 and 2005 except Canada, which the proportion had no change. The deviation between the percentages was very higher in 1970 and the numbers came very close in 2005.


In 1970, Canada ranked first with 60% and Germany and the USA placed second and third. Japan had the lowest percentage among the countries (20%). 35 years later, although the order of the countries in the ranking changed, Canada and Japan remained in the highest and lowest places (60% vs 40%). In 2005, the UK had the same proportion as Canada followed by the USA and Germany. The percentage for Japan had a significant increase in the percentage (100%) between two years.

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I rewrote the writing. Please let me know your opinion about the new version.

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It is better.



The bar chart shows the percentage of women who went to college after secondary school in the years 1970 and 2005. The data are given for five different countries which are the UK, the USA, Canada, Japan, and Germany.


Overall, the percentage increased for all countries between 1970 and 2005 except Canada, which the proportion had no change. The deviation differences between the percentages was very higher (ungrammatical) in 1970 and the numbers (wrong word) came very close in 2005.


In 1970, Canada ranked first with 60% and Germany and the USA placed second and third. Japan had the lowest percentage among the countries (20%). 35 years later, (Do not begin a sentence with a number.) although the order of the countries in the ranking changed, Canada and Japan remained in the highest and lowest places (60% vs 40%). In 2005, the UK had the same proportion as Canada followed by the USA and Germany. The percentage for Japan had a significant increase in the percentage ( (You used "percentage" twice in this sentence.) 100%) between the two years.

Thanks a lot, Dear Alphecca

Can I start a sentence with word form of a number? For example thirty-five years later instead of 35 years later?

Regards

Alireza Movahedi

Thanks a lot, Dear Alphecca

Can I start a sentence with word form of a number? For example thirty-five years later instead of 35 years later?

Regards

Yes.

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