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Hello! I'm taking an IELTS Test and practicing writing in the IELTS Writing Task 1. Could you give me some comments on my essay here and correct me where I have mistake? Thank you so much!

Here is the essay:

The graph illustrates information about how many Vietnamese students studying in three different countries in a period of 15 years starting from 2000.

It is clear that while the number of students enrolling in American and French schools increased, the opposite was true for Russian schools. In addition, the most significant change could be seen in the figure for Vietnamese students studying in the US.

In the year 2000, France had the most Vietnamese students with 3.5 million in comparison with 3 million and 1.5 million of Russia and America respectively. During the next 5 years, the number of students from Vietnam going to France and Russia experienced a slight decrease of about 1 million each while a gradual growth could be seen in that for America.

From 2005 to 2015, while the number of Vietnamese students going to the US witnessed a dramatic increase and finally hit a peak at 5 million, the figure for France remained stable for two years before rising sharply to over 4 million and the end of the period. Meanwhile, the average number of Vietnamese students applying in Russian schools hit the lowest point of just under 2 million but then recover gradually back to 2.5 million in 2015.

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The graph illustrates information about how many Vietnamese students were studying in three different countries in over a 15-year period of 15 years starting from 2000.

It is clear that while the number of Vietnamese students enrolling in at American and French schools academic institutions increased overall, the opposite was true for those studying in Russia. n schools. In addition, the most significant change could be seen in the figure for Vietnamese students studying in the US saw no decline throughout the given period.

In the year 2000, France had the most Vietnamese students with 3.5 million in comparison with 3 million and 1.5 million of in Russia and America respectively. During the next 5 years, the number of students from Vietnam going to France and Russia experienced a slight decrease of about 1 million each while a gradual growth could be seen in that for America.

From 2005 to 2015, while the number of Vietnamese students going to the US witnessed a dramatic increase and finally hit a peak at 5 million, the figure for France remained stable for two years before rising sharply to over 4 million and at the end of the period. Meanwhile, the average number of Vietnamese students applying in Russia n schools hit the lowest point of just under 2 million in 2010 but then recovered gradually back to 2.5 million in 2015.

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