THE PIE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE MAIN REASONS WHY AGRICULTURAL LAND BECOMES LESS PRODUCTIVE. THE TABLE SHOWS HOW THESE CAUSES AFFECTED THREE REGIONS OF THE WORLD DURING THE 1990S.

SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.

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The pie chart illustrates there are four major causes for farmland becoming deteriorated in the world today mainly including over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation. While the table compares the causes of land degradation in 3 regions: North America, Europe, and Oceania in the 1990s.

Overall, spending on animal grazing and tree clearance account for the largest proportions of degradation, constituting 35% and 30%. Over-cultivation crops also make up 28% of global degradation. Other causes represent only 7% collectively. In addition, it is clear that Europe suffered more than farmland degradation than the other regions.

As can be seen from the table, Europe, with the highest percentage of land degraded ( 23%), followed by Oceania and North America, by 13% and 5% respectively. Especially, in Europe, 9,8% was suffered from deforestation, with 7,7% from over-cultivation, and 5,5% from over-grazing. In contrast, North America has the lowest proportion of degraded land, in particular, over-cultivation occupied 3.3%, animal grazing (1,5%), and only 0,2% of tree clearance. Finally, the figure for Oceania is slightly more than that of Europe, which had 11.3% of overgrazing, 1.7% of deforestation.

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The pie chart illustrates there are four major causes for farmland becoming deteriorated in the world today mainly including over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation. While the table compares the causes of land degradation in 3 regions: North America, Europe, and Oceania in the 1990s.

Overall, spending on animal grazing and tree clearance account for the largest proportions of degradation degradation, constituting 35% and 30%. Over-cultivation crops also make up 28% of global degradation. Other causes represent only 7% collectively. In addition, it is clear that Europe suffered more than farmland degradation than the other regions.

As can be seen from the table, Europe, with accounts for the highest percentage of land degraded degradation( 23%), followed by Oceania and North America, by 13% and 5% respectively. Especially, in Europe, 9,8% was suffered from deforestation, with 7,7% from over-cultivation, and 5,5% from over-grazing. In contrast, North America has the lowest proportion of degraded land, in particular, over-cultivation occupied 3.3%, animal grazing (1,5%), and only 0,2% of tree clearance. Finally, the figure for Oceania is slightly more than that of Europe, which had 11.3% of overgrazing, 1.7% of deforestation


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The pie chart illustrates (poor word choice. Do not use "illustrate" for charts and graphs.) there are four (wrong word - there are three, not four) major causes for farmland becoming deteriorated (wrong word) in the world today mainly including over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation. While the table compares the causes of land degradation (This is a fragment, a dependent clause, not a sentence.) in 3 (Write words for small numbers that are not data values) regions: North America, Europe, and Oceania in the 1990s. (Wrong phrase position)

Overall, spending (wrong word - there is no money depicted) on animal grazing and tree clearance account for the largest proportions of degradation, constituting 35% and 30%. Over-cultivation crops (wrong phrase) also make up 28% of global degradation. Other causes represent only 7% collectively. In addition, it is clear that ("filler" - words of no merit.) Europe suffered more than farmland (wrong word) degradation than the other regions.

As can be seen from the table, Europe, with the highest percentage of land degraded ( 23%), (This is a fragment, a noun phrase, not a sentence.) followed by Oceania and North America, by 13% and 5% respectively. Especially, in Europe, 9,8% (The values in the table do not contain commas) was suffered (Be consistent in your use of tenses.) from deforestation, with 7,7% from over-cultivation, and 5,5% from over-grazing. In contrast, North America has the lowest proportion of degraded land, (comma splice error) in particular, over-cultivation occupied (wrong word) 3.3%, animal grazing (1,5%), and only 0,2% of tree clearance. Finally, the figure (wrong word) for Oceania is slightly more than that of Europe, which had 11.3% of overgrazing, and 1.7% of deforestation.

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