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The grouped bar chart shows transport preferences among young people from different countries. In general, car is the most favorite mode in most surveyed nations while the preferences for motorcycle and bicycle vary depending on countries.

To specify, the percentage of people in Great Britain like traveling by car most is 60%, the same as in the USA, while the figure in Germany drops to 40% and rises to more than 70% in France. Although motorcycles are more popular than cycling among young American with the percentage of 30, it is the least favorite in three other countries. Each respective rate with Great Britain, Germany and France is 10%, around 15% and 10%. Bicycles are preferred least in the USA meanwhile being the top choice of young German and is the second favorite mode in Great Britain and France.
Strikingly, the percentage of the least transport mode in Great Britain, USA and France is the same with 10%, only the one of Germany is around 15% for motorcycle.

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The grouped bar chart shows transport preferences (What are the different transports?) among young people from different (How many? What are they?) countries. (The description is very incomplete. You have changed topics from discussing the figure to pointing out the main features. You must start a new paragraph if you change topics.)

In general, a car is the most favorite mode in most surveyed nations (The reader has no idea if you are referring to 137 different countries or 2 countries. Your writing is not effective in conveying information.) while the preferences for motorcycle and bicycle vary depending on countries.
To specify, the percentage (You have never mentioned "percentage". The units of measure need to be in the first paragraph. You are not doing a good job on Task 1.) of people in Great Britain (Not all the people...) like traveling by car most is 60%, the same as in the USA, while the figure (wrong word) in Germany drops to 40% and is more than 70% (Imprecise. 85 is more than 70 and so is 92.) in France. Although motorcycles are more popular than cycling among young American (wrong form) with the percentage of 30, (Unnatural) it is the least favorite in three other countries. (Which ones? You still have not reported the list of countries.) The figure one (wrong words) for Great Britain, Germany and France is respectively 10%, around 15% and 10%. Bicycles are preferred least in the USA meanwhile being the top choice of young German (wrong form) and is the second favorite mode in Great Britain and France.
Strikingly, (wrong word. Do not put dramatic words in Task 1. There is no drama in math.) the percentage of the least transport mode (awkward, unnatural) in Great Britain, USA and France is the same, 10%, only the one of Germany (unnatural) is different, around 15% for motorcycle (missing punctuation)



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The grouped bar chart shows transport preferences among young people from different countries. In general, car is the most favorite mode in most surveyed nations while the preferences for motorcycle and bicycle vary depending on countries.
To specify, the percentage of people in Great Britain like traveling by car most is 60%, the same as in the USA, while the figure in Germany drops to 40% and is more than 70% in France. Although motorcycles are more popular than cycling among young American with the percentage of 30, it is the least favorite in three other countries. The figure one for Great Britain, Germany and France is respectively 10%, around 15% and 10%. Bicycles are preferred least in the USA meanwhile being the top choice of young German and is the second favorite mode in Great Britain and France.
Strikingly, the percentage of the least transport mode in Great Britain, USA and France is the same, 10%, only the one of Germany is different, around 15% for motorcycle

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