Ielts Writing Task 1?

The charts illustrate the number and kinds of books bought by gender and four varous age groups in the UK.

As can be seen from the charts,the total two types of books bought by women is higher than men,although they slightly fewer non-fiction book.The age group buys the most books is over 45 years old group.

Regarding to male and female,nearly 60% of women buy fiction books,which is almost twice as many as the number of men choose this type of book.With regard to people who buy non-fiction,the gender gap is not really significant.

Looking specifically at age group,most people buy fiction books than non-fiction onrs.Customer aged over 45 buy the most in both types of books.However,the smallest number of fictions books bought is bought by 16 to 24 years old group,and non-fiction ones are bought the least by 25 to 34 age group.

The two bar charts illustrate the number and kinds of books, fiction and non-fiction, bought by gender men and women and four varous age groups in the UK.

As can be seen from the charts, Overall, the total two types of books bought by Women buy many more fiction books is higher than [ 1] compared to men, although they buy slightly fewer non-fiction books. Moreover, the age group which buys the most books is the [ 2] over-45-years-old group.

[ 3] Regarding to male and female, Nearly 60% of women buy fiction books, [ 4] which is almost twice as many as double the number percentage of men who choose this type of book. [ 4] With regard to people who buy non-fiction, [ 4] the gender gap is not really significant, with both around the 50% mark.

Looking specifically at age groups, most people [ 5] buy prefer fiction books than non-fiction books. onrs. Customers aged over 45 buy the most in of both types of books. [ 4] However, [ 4] the [ 6] smallest number of fictions books bought is bought by only 40% of those 16 to 24 years old buy fiction, group, and just 30% non-fiction ones are bought the least by aged 25 to 34 buy non-fiction books, and those are the lowest levels in the charts. age group.

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[ 1]: Note the correct comparison structure.

[ 2]: Note the hyphenation. Alternatively, you could say “Moreover, people who are 45 years of age or older buy the most books”.

[ 3]: “Regarding to” is unnatural. Do not use it.

[ 4]: We put a space after a punctuation mark.

[ 5]: Your phrasing suggests that most only buy fiction (that they do not buy non-fiction).

[ 6]: The number of books is not given in the chart. Be careful not to make such incorrect inferences.

Thank you for taking the time to fix my writing.To be honest,I’m quite bad at IELTS Writing but I want to achieve band 7.0 in this skill and I just have 10 months left to acquire that.Can you give me some advice how to improve my Writing skill ? Thanks a lott

16- Đặng Công Khải-11.9I want to achieve band 7.0 in this skill and I just have 10 months left to acquire [ 1] do that. [ 2] Can you give me some advice how to improve my Writing skill? [ 2]

1: "acquire" is not always a suitable synonym for "get".

2: I told you above, and I repeat: We put a space after a punctuation mark (not before it).

To improve your writing, you need to do two things:

a- Read as much as possible (news and current affairs, sample essays, etc)

b- Practise writing IELTS essays whenever you have time.