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The pie chart plot the proportion of four agricultural products: Vegetables, Dairy, Grain and Meat in two various regions: Western and Eastern of a country.

In general, the percentages of farm products in Eastern was different from Western, except for the values of Meat, which was 35 percent.

In Eastern, the most abundant product was Meat, with 35 percent. Following this, Dairy was the second highest percentages of agricultural goods and a gap between Meat and Dairy was only five percent. Twenty percent was the value vegetables contributed in agricultural production while grain stayed at the lowest proportion with fifteen percent.

In comparison with Eastern, eighty percent of agricultural products in Western were Grain and Meat, particularly, grain was in the top proportion with 45 percent, followed by Meat, 35 percent. Moreover, there was an unbalance of allocating agricultural production in Western, just only five percent of Vegetables was recorded and the left product was Dairy with fifteen percent in overall.

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The pie chart plot (subject/verb mismatch. How many pie charts are there?) the proportion of four agricultural products: (That is not what is plotted.) Vegetables, Dairy, Grain and Meat in two various regions of a country: Western and Eastern of a country.


The two pie charts, labeled Eastern region and Western region, give the proportions of different types of farm products grown in that region. There are four classifications of these products; two are plant-based (vegetables and grains) and two are animal-based (dairy and meat.)



In general, the percentages of farm products in Eastern region was different from Western, except for that of the values of Meat, which was 35 percent.


In the second paragraph, write two or three significant observations. You only gave one, and it is not particularly insightful.

e.g.

Half of the products of the Western region were animal-based. Easterners raised proportionately more animals; with 15% more produce being sourced from farm animals (65%) as compared to crops (35%). This difference was attributed to dairy products, since the meat production was the same percentage for both regions. Vegetable farming was more intensive in the Eastern region, with relatively four times more than in the west, 20% versus 5%. In contrast, grains were more intensively farmed in the west, 45% versus 15% in the east.



In Eastern, the most abundant product was Meat, with 35 percent. Following this, Dairy was the second highest percentages of agricultural goods and with the gap between Meat and Dairy being was only five percent. Twenty percent was the value vegetables contributed in agricultural production while grain had stayed at the lowest proportion with fifteen percent.

In comparison with the Eastern region, eighty percent of agricultural products in the West Western were Grain and Meat. In particular, grain was in the top proportion with 45 percent, followed by Meat, 35 percent. Moreover, there was an unbalance of allocating agricultural production in Western, just only five percent of for Vegetables was recorded and the left product was the remaining fifteen percent for Dairy with fifteen percent in overall.

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