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Topic: Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Discussion:

The tertiary tuition has increased inexorably in recent years, which results in two opposite thinking of whether students should be waived tuition or not. I believe that abolishing college tuition may bring a lot of merits and demerits.
First and foremost, abolishing tuition increase the rate of enrollment. The unprivileged have more opportunities to access university, irrespective of their financial background. Moreover, job seeking has emerged as a topic of pivotal interest as it is, tertiary qualification holders stand a better chance to get a good finance career.
In the contract, the pursuit of tertiary education without fee may deteriorate their study performance. For example, if students do not have a financial obligation, they will never put themselves into the study to pass their discipline, let alone graduating. Last but not least, students may not recognize the indeed value of the tertiary qualification because it costs nothing in the learning process. As can be seen, the graduate’s effort seems to be in vain if everyone can pass their study.
In conclusion, abolishing college fee can bring a lot of advantages but not for everyone.

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I did not understand most of your argument points. You did not address the topic correctly.


The tertiary tuition for tertiary education has increased inexorably in recent years, which results in (ungrammatical) a proposal of waiving of whether tuition for students students should be waived tuition or not. I believe that abolishing college tuition may bring a lot of merits and demerits. (wrong word)

You did not answer the essay prompt, so you will lose a lot of points. This is not an "advantages/disadvantages" type of essay. If you answer a different type of essay, it is not good for your score.

The essay prompt is: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You must give an opinion with an adverb of extent. Do you know any of these adverbs?

For example:

1. I partly agree. The reduction in tuition should be given to poor families who cannot afford it.
2. I completely agree that university education has to be free for everyone, the same as primary and secondary school.
3. I totally disagree. To maintain the highest quality of education, students must pay some of the costs.
4. I somewhat agree. Tuition has to be assessed on a sliding-scale basis: nothing for the poorest students and full tuition for the richest ones.


First and foremost, abolishing tuition increase (wrong form) the rate of enrollment. The unprivileged (wrong word - I do not know what you mean. ) have more opportunities to access university, irrespective of their financial background. Moreover, job seeking has emerged as a topic of pivotal interest (I do not understand. What does this have to do with tuition?) as it is, tertiary qualification holders (Not a good expression.) stand a better chance to get a good finance career.

(Do you mean a career in finance, such as a stockbroker or economist? I do not understand this point. In fact, I did not understand the paragraph. )

In the contract, (What contract are you talking about?) the pursuit of tertiary education without fee may deteriorate their (Whose?) study performance. For example, if students do not have a financial obligation, they will never put themselves into the study (The study is a room in a house, similar to a bedroom, dining room or kitchen.) to pass their discipline, (wrong word) let alone graduating. Last but not least, students may not recognize the indeed (wrong word) value of the tertiary qualification because it costs nothing in the learning process. As can be seen, the graduate’s effort seems to be in vain if everyone can pass their study. (I do not understand. The topic is not about grades or marks or the intensity of studying. It is about paying money to attend university. If a student does not pass his exams, he will be expelled from school and not allowed to return.)
In conclusion, abolishing college fee can bring a lot of advantages but not for everyone. (off-topic)