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Topic: Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.


We are living in a modernly technological society with lots of high – tech equipments allowing us to experience and travel elsewhere from home. But for me, I believe that it will be very hard to describe and share enough the feeling and experience only through TV and the internet to each others.

It cannot be denied that TV and the internet are the cheapest and most convenient way to travel to another country. From my point of view, However, we don’t see about the aspects of sharing and feeling of each others are different from every contents on TV or the internet. For example, an introverted person seem to be more interested in scenes or contents like natural and scenery integrated with baroque music. In contrast, extrovert people tend to be more suitable with scenes or contents about outdoor or crowded activities. Therefore, we have to be wait or read so much to meet our requirement. Secondly, at TV and the internet we need to consider about how exactly the information goes. It would be very funny if pictures of a country align with contents of another as an example. Once the information is not true, it will be a bad effect to both viewers and tourist destinations.

On the contrary, travelling abroad is so costly but everything we touches always makes us satisfied. When we go abroad directly, we can choose and consider all of aspects of the place where we go in an active way. For instance, we have a trip to Tokyo which is famous for cherry blossom, Japanese tea ceremony and night’s life activities. All of that references can be easy to look for on the internet and TV show programs. In that way, however, we cannot find out the difference in cuisine and culture of each alleys in Tokyo. As a consequence, Travelling abroad is really a dominant choice if we want to interact with all of hidden features not revealed before.

In conclusion, Having a broad trip seem to be an entire way if we want to learn about other countries. However, people with limited incomes can choose travelling on their smartphone as an low-cost way for abroad experience. In the future, both of this kind of travelling maybe will become more and more popular when the corona pandemic are unstable of each countries.


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We are living in a modernly (Not a valid word) technological society with lots of high – tech (wrong punctuation) equipments (wrong word and wrong form. equipment is non-count) allowing us to experience and travel elsewhere (experience elsewhere is not good English) from home.


But for me, I believe that it will be very hard to describe and share enough the feeling (That makes no sense) and experience only through TV and the internet to each others.

You did not address the topic properly. You did not mention the two different attitudes.

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We live in the internet age where we can travel virtually to nearly every corner of the globe by just visiting different countries' websites. Besides, there are many travel shows and documentaries on TV. So that leads some people to have the opinion that you do not need to leave home to travel the world and see all the variety of cultures and landscapes. However, I do not agree...



It cannot be denied that TV and the internet are the cheapest and most convenient way to travel to learn about another country. From my point of view, However, we don’t (Do not use contractions in a formal essay.) see about the aspects of sharing and feeling of each others are different from every contents (wrong word) on TV or the internet. (That is ungrammatical and incomprehensible. I do not know what you mean. Write simpler sentences.) For example, an introverted person seem to be more interested in scenes or contents (wrong word) like natural (wrong word) and scenery integrated with baroque (I do not understand why you picked this genre. I have never heard it with travel programs on TV.) music. In contrast, extrovert people tend to be more suitable (wrong word) with scenes or contents about outdoor or crowded activities. (This does not seem to be on the topic. ) Therefore, we have to be wait or read so much to meet our requirement. (I do not understand this - what requirement are you talking about?) Secondly, at TV and the internet we need to consider about how exactly the information goes. It would be very funny if pictures of a country align with contents of another as an example. Once the information is not true, (I do not understand your argument. If I visit a website about Vietnam, I will not see penguins, glaciers of ice and polar bears, will I? If I watch a program about Japan, I will not hear people speaking Norwegian, will I?) it will be a bad effect to both viewers and tourist destinations.

On the contrary, travelling abroad is so costly but everything we touches (wrong word, wrong form)) always makes us satisfied. When we go abroad directly, we can choose and consider all of aspects of the place where we go in an active way. For instance, we have a trip to Tokyo which is famous for cherry blossom, (wrong form) Japanese tea ceremony and night’s (wrong form) life activities. All of that references (wrong usage) can be easy to look for find on the internet and TV show programs. In that way, however, we cannot find out see the difference in cuisine and culture of each alleys (wrong form) in Tokyo. As a consequence, Travelling (wrong punctuation) abroad is really a dominant (wrong word) choice if we want to interact with all of hidden features not revealed before.

In conclusion, Having a broad (wrong word) trip seem to be an entire (wrong word) way if we want to learn about other countries. However, people with limited incomes can choose travelling on their smartphone as an low-cost way for an experience abroad. abroad experience. In the future, both of this (wrong form) kind (wrong form) of travelling maybe will become more and more popular when the corona pandemic are unstable of each countries.

Do not introduce any new information or ideas in the conclusion. Just summarize your points. Most of your essay was not focused on the topic. There were many grammatical errors and wrong word usages. You need to use words that you know very well. Write simpler sentences and your essay will have a better score. Also, make better arguments. For example, can you smell the cherry blossoms on the internet? Can you feel the wind and the temperature of the mountain air? Can you taste a special dish that is the specialty of a culture? Can you meet people and practice your language skills? Can you buy a unique souvenir, such as a handmade item, that will remind you of the place many years after you have visited it?