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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want.

To what extent should children have to follow rules?

It is true that in some nations, kids have to follow a strict code of conduct while in some countries they are not. The purpose of this essay is to discuss both sides of this contentious argument and then explain why I agree with the latter view.

On the one hand, proponents of the idea that children should not follow strict rules of behavior tend to point out a combination of reasons. First and foremost, it will make children free to invent. For example, children with a lot of freedom will feel curiosity about everything around them, which makes them broaden knowledge faster than those who only study at school. Another compelling reason is that they will become more self-reliant, more independent. For instance, parents teach their kids this way will leave them to play alone, not look after them with so much time, everything that their sons make, they not hold the responsibility for it but by themself.

on the other hand, I believe that children must follow a code of conduct. The primary reason is that, they will become a good mature of society. Thus, kids must be guided in the observation of parents and school, they will orientate children when they lost their way, encourage and help them to surpass. Furthermore, it will bring a lot of career opportunities for children. To illustrate, Japanese companies recruit employees, who have permissive characteristics and follow the rules of the company, it only gains when kids had been teaching from a young.

In conclusion, I believe that although leaving the children to do anything they want have some advantages but i prefer the idea that children should learn a rules of behavior when they were a young.

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191295HungThe purpose of this essay is to discuss both sides of this contentious argument and then explain why I agree with the latter view.

Never mention your essay. The examiner does know what the essay is about. They do not know what your main point is. So write a thesis statement, not what the instructions are.

This essay prompt is "To what extent...?" So your thesis statement must answer this question. The questions asks you take a position at or in between the two extremes. So a thesis statement could be one of these:

1. I think that rules must be strict and children should have to follow them at all times. (extent)

2. Strict rules are not effective, and children need to have as much freedom as reasonably possible. (the opposite extent)

3. I somewhat agree with both extremes. Rules should be flexible and teacher must have some discretion in enforcing them. (partial extent)

Then the body paragraphs must give the reasons why you have chosen that position.


You will lose points if you do not follow the instructions (and prompt) exactly. So read the instructions more than once before you answer. Write an answer to the prompt. It is the main question.



It is true that (Avoid these meaningless it-statements Would you write a false statement? A direct statement is much more effective. ) In some nations, kids children ("Kid" is very informal.) have to follow a strict code of conduct while in some countries others (Learn to use pronouns instead of synonyms, which can be annoying ) they are do not. The purpose of this essay is to discuss both sides of this contentious argument and then explain why I agree side completely with the latter view. (Completely is an adverb of extent. It answers the question "To what extent")

On the one hand, proponents of the idea that children should not follow strict rules of behavior tend to point out a combination of reasons. First and foremost, it will make children free to invent things.. For example, children with a lot of freedom will feel curiosity about everything around them, which makes them broaden their knowledge faster than those who only follow the teachers' instructions and do not deviate from the lesson plan. study at school. (off-topic. Both sets will study at school.) Another compelling reason is that they will become more self-reliant and more independent. For instance, parents teach their children kids this way will leave them to play alone, not look after them with so much time, everything that their sons make, they not hold the responsibility for it but by themself. (That is not good English. I have not idea what you mean. Please write this in clear and grammatical sentences.

"On the one hand / On the other hand" does not fit this task. You need for write paragraphs structured like this:

First, (give the first argument for your position.)

Second, (give the second argument for your position.)

You did not write the correct essay type.

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on the other hand, I believe many societies believe that (Do not write your opinion in the body paragraphs. The purpose of the body paragraph is to support the opinion that you stated in the first paragraph.) children must follow a code of conduct. The primary reason is that, they will become a good mature (wrong word) of society. Thus, kids must be guided in the observation of parents and school, they will orientate children when they lost their way, encourage and help them to surpass. (ungrammatical.) Furthermore, it will bring a lot of career opportunities for children. To illustrate this, Japanese companies recruit employees, who have permissive (wrong word) characteristics and follow the rules of the company, (comma splice error) it only gains when kids had been teaching (wrong verb form. Kids do not thach. Their parents or school teachers do that.) from a young age.

In conclusion, I believe that although leaving the children to do anything they want have some advantages but i prefer the idea that children should learn a rules of behavior when they were (wrong verb tense) a young. (You still did not answer the essay prompt.)


You wrote an advantages/disadvantages essay. But this essay was not that kind of essay. So you lose a lot of points for "task achievement." You need to write two arguments that support the position that you have taken.