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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

Why might this be the case?

Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

It is borne in minds of people from many nations that possessing a house is more important than paying money to rent one. In my opinion, it is a pessimistic situation.

Firstly, people have to spend most of their life to earn enough money to buy a house. They are inclined to ignore and forget other things that are also important in life and all they do is working harder and harder. For many countries, the amount of money needed to buy a home is crazily expensive and many people can not afford to buy one. For example, the price of houses in America from the small to the big one is relatively expensive, the average money people need to have to buy a house in the United State is about 600.000$.

Secondly, owning a house is becoming an essential standard in choosing wives or husbands which is a negative trend. When the problem of whether a person has a house or not affects the choice of partner, the emotional aspects will be something that is less important. After all, it will partly lead to an unhappy marriage. For instance, in Asian countries, a man needs to possess a house and sometimes plus a car before thinking about getting married to a woman.

To conclude, for the reasons stated above, it will be better to carefully make a decision when people are in confusion about whether that should own a home or not. Renting a house is also a good choice that people should consider.

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