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Some rich countries provide financial support to the poor countries, but some other people claim that they should provide some other types of help to those poor countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give example for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


It is true that nowadays, developing countries are often gotten financial supports by the developed countries. However, the action draws splits opinions. Many people claims that the rich countries should help those poor countries with other types of support instead of affects their financial statement. In my point of view, the rich countries should provide different types of support for the poor countries.

The reasons for the financial support are simple to explain. Firstly, giving away a large amount of money represent how generous and powerful these rich countries are. As the results, those poor countries become the allies with their supporters since they rely on these foreign source of money, which can affects the vote and opinion of the authorities in global meeting. Secondly, poor countries might not use the financial support wisely in order to improve their economy. For example, Pakistan is one of those poor countries who has received extremely high financial support from America, although their crisis has not yet improved in many decades.

Likewise, I must argue that the idea of giving financial support is inappropriate in many ways. In terms of what situation of those poor countries are going through, the rich countries could provide what are consider necessary for their improvement, such as food, medical supplies and military. In this way, poor countries would have the right support to go through their tough time. Besides, the relationship between the supporters and the receivers would be clear and healthy.

In the conclusion, financial support represents an action of helping each other, however, I would argue that this form of help could worsen the situation, instead, rich countries should support poor countries with the right form of help that they need.

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It is true that (Those words add no content to the essay. They distract the reader, too. Would you write something that is false?) nowadays, developing countries are often gotten (wrong verb form. The passive voice is incorrect. ) financial supports (wrong form. Support is non-count.) by from the developed countries. However, the action draws splits opinions. (That is not an effective sentence. It is unnatural English. Delete it.) Many people claims (wrong verb form. Subject-verb disagreement.) that the rich countries should help those poor countries with other types of support instead of (Inappropriate. It is not about replacing all the money with something else) affects ( wrong word You cannot use a verb as the object of a preposition. ) their financial statement. (wrong words. A financial statement is a required form the companies must submit to the government. It lists their assets and liabilities, income, expenses, and other items.) In my point of view, the rich countries should provide different types of support (You will lose points for repeating the same word too many times. Also, you did not clearly answer the prompt.) for the poor countries.


The essay question is: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You should answer with an adverb of extent. Here is a list of them: fully, completely, totally, wholeheartedly, partly, partially, somewhat, a little bit, without reservations, with reservations.

Model opening paragraph:

Developing countries often receive financial support from the developed countries. Many people claim that this is inadequate, that the rich countries should help with various types of assistance in addition to money. I completely agree. Rich countries can contribute in many other ways so that the underdeveloped countries can raise the standard of living for their citizens.




The reasons for the financial support are simple to explain. Firstly, First, giving away a large amount of money represent (wrong verb form. Subject-verb disagreement.) how generous and powerful these rich countries are. As the results, those poor countries become the allies with of their supporters since they rely on these foreign source (wrong form.) of money, which can affects (wrong form.) the vote and opinion of the authorities in global meeting. (wrong form. Secondly, Second, poor countries might not use the financial support wisely in order to improve their economy. (That is not a reason that the rich countries give money. Your paragraph is now incoherent. You lose a lot of points for this.) For example, Pakistan is one of those poor countries who that has received extremely high financial support from America, although their crisis (wrong word.) has not yet improved in many decades.

Likewise, I must argue that (Unnecessary. Just present your arguments.) the idea of giving financial support is inappropriate (wrong word. The topic is not the validity of giving money. ) in many ways. In terms of what situation of those poor countries are going through, the rich countries could provide what are consider (wrong form.) necessary for their improvement, such as food, medical supplies and weapons. military. (wrong word. Military is an adjective, not a noun.) .In this way, poor countries would have the right support to go through their tough times. Besides, the relationship between the supporters and the receivers would be clear and healthy.

In the conclusion, financial support represents an action of helping each other, (wrong punctuation. Comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence.) however, I would argue that this form of help could worsen the situation, (wrong punctuation. Comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence.) instead, rich countries should support poor countries with the right form of help that they need. (You did not address the essay topic accurately. You will lose points for "task completion".)

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