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In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

While some people believe that communication between managers and employees play the most significant role in the success of any organizations, others hold the opinion that there are more critical factors. In my viewpoint, successful businesses attribute to human management and qualified worker resources.
To begin with, good communication between staffs and employers can encourage effective collaboration. Since workers have a feeling of respect and recognition in the companies, they tend to devote most of their passions and ideas, making the work environment more positive. This would incentivize people to work effectively, boosting the companies’ productivity and profits. Additionally, managers can understand employees’ needs and desires, such as bonuses, long holiday vacations, etc. Therefore, the level of job satisfaction would be improved, hence reducing the turnover rates.
However, there are various attributes to the success of the companies, some of which could be considered to be more important than effective communication. The first factor for success is good management. Unless managers formulate such useful policies to the companies, workers cannot do their best and even be more stressed in virtue of poor management skills. Another factor contributing to successful businesses is the reliability and availability of good employees. For example, large companies such as Google, usually hire exceptionally qualified and experienced people to work for them. Therefore, I believe a combination of both factors would lead any businesses to success.
In conclusion, although some people believe communication between employers and workers is the most crucial factors, I think good management and human resources are paramount of importance.

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While some people believe that communication between managers and employees play (subject/verb mismatch) the most significant role in the success of any organizations, (Incorrect form) others hold the opinion that there are more critical factors. In my viewpoint, successful businesses attribute to (Incorrect form) human management and qualified worker resources. (very awkward and unnatural phrasing)
To begin with, good communication between staffs (Incorrect form) and employers can encourage effective collaboration. Since workers have a feeling of respect and recognition in the companies, they tend to devote (Incorrect usage) most of their passions and ideas, making the work environment more positive. This would incentivizes people to work effectively, boosting the companies’ productivity and profits. Additionally, managers can understand employees’ needs and desires, such as bonuses, long holiday vacations, etc. (Incorrect. Do not use unfinished ideas - ellipses, "etc." or "and so on" in essays.) Therefore, the level of job satisfaction would be improved, hence reducing the turnover rates.
However, there are various attributes to the success of the companies, some of which could be considered to be more important than effective communication. The first factor for success is good management. (Isn't communication the fundamental core of good management?) Unless managers formulate such useful policies to the companies, workers cannot do their best and even be more stressed in virtue of (Incorrect usage) poor management skills. Another factor contributing to successful businesses is the reliability and availability of good employees. For example, large companies such as Google, usually hire exceptionally qualified and experienced people to work for them. (State your opinion in only two places, the introduction and conclusion. Otherwise, you are being repetitive.) Therefore, I believe a combination of both factors would lead any businesses to success.
In conclusion, although some people believe communication between employers and workers is the most crucial factors, (Incorrect form) I think good management and human resources are paramount of (Incorrect word) importance.

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Thank you very much.

I don't know how to use 'attribute' correctly. Could you help me?

And does 'in virtue of' mean 'because of'? In what situation can it be used?

Lom NguyenI don't know how to use 'attribute' correctly

You have to be careful of using the passive and active forms.

In my viewpoint, businesses attribute their success to good management policies and having motivated and qualified workers.

In my viewpoint, business success can be attributed to good management policies and having motivated and qualified workers.

Lom NguyenAnd does 'in virtue of' mean 'because of'?

That is British English. I only know the American English: by virtue of. Here is an example:

Secretariat, the greatest race horse of the twentieth century, was able to win consistently by virtue of his extraordinarily large heart and his unquenchable desire to beat his rivals.

Since "virtue" is a positive quality, a strength, a good quality or merit, it does not fit all contexts that the more general "because of" does.


By virtue of good management, fair pay and other perks,  employees seldom quit and leave a well-run company. 

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