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More and more people are moving to cities to look for work. What problems does this cause? What are the possible solutions?
The migration of people to cities in search of better employment opportunities has become an increasingly common phenomenon. This essay intends to discuss the major problems caused by urban-migration and a few possible solutions to address the issue.
Urban migration for employment has been a major cause for the overflowing population in cities. The unregulated influx of people into cities has disrupted the smooth conduct of cities in terms of transportation, habitation, and resource availability. For example, metropolitan cities such as Mumbai and Delhi are witnessing an overwhelming immigration derailing the city traffic mechanism because of which traffic blocks have become an everyday menace. There has also been an enormous boom in construction activities to accommodate the growing population. Moreover, as a result of exceeding population, there has been an increase in demand for resources causing inflation and economic crisis.
The best solution to tackle the issues are; primarily, more development activities have to be initiated in the rural areas to facilitate the livelihood requirements of the rural dwellers. Secondly, migration to cities must be regulated with proper checks and balances. The government should introduce policies pertaining to this so that the existing population is not affected in terms of availability of space for habitation and transportation. Most importantly, resource management should be taken care of by the government with due care and urgency as basic necessities of all people should be equally addressed.
To conclude, migration to cities has been a serious issue long overlooked without any regard. It can be efficiently managed with the discretionary involvement of the government and the pragmatic approach of individuals.
The migration of people to cities in search of better employment opportunities has become an increasingly common. phenomenon. (wrong word.) This essay intends to discuss the major problems caused by urban-migration and a few possible solutions to address the issue. (Do not paraphrase the prompts. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know the task and the prompts. Do not tell them these facts. Instead, give a brief introduction to your main points.
This has caused a variety of problems such as traffic jams and lack of affordable housing. However the government can take measures to stem the flow and ease the problems.
Urban migration for employment has been a major cause for the overflowing city populations. in cities. The unregulated influx of people into cities has disrupted the smooth conduct of cities in terms of transportation, habitation, (wrong word) and resource availability. For example, metropolitan areas around cities such as Mumbai and Delhi are witnessing an overwhelming immigration overwhelmed by new residents, overcrowding the public transportation systems and jamming the streets with derailing the city traffic. Commute times are unacceptably long. (You need to develop your argument points better. Can you give specifics?) mechanism because of which traffic blocks have become an everyday menace. There has also been an enormous boom in construction activities to accommodate the growing population. Moreover, as a result of exceeding population, There has been an increase in demand for resources causing inflation and economic crisis.
The best solution to tackle the issues are; primarily, (solution is singular) is to initiate more development activities have to be initiated in the rural areas so that people can find employment, housing and services there. to facilitate the livelihood requirements of the rural dwellers. Secondly, migration to cities must be regulated with proper checks and balances. The government should introduce policies that discourage unchecked migration. pertaining to this so that the existing population is not affected in terms of availability of space for habitation and transportation. (I do not understand your point.) Most importantly, resource management should be taken care of by the government with due care and urgency as basic necessities of all people should be equally addressed. (This is very vague. I don't have an idea of what specific actions must be taken. )
To conclude, migration to cities has been a serious issue long overlooked without any regard. It can be efficiently managed with the discretionary involvement of the government and the pragmatic approach of individuals. (There was nothing about individuals in the "solutions" paragraph. Do not add new information in the conclusion.)
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