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This is my essay for IELTS Writing Task 1. I would be grateful if someone here sends me some comments.

IELTS Writing Task 1 - Agricultural Producion



The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops different major food.

In the East of the country, meat is the most popular product with thirty-five percent of production. The second highest percentage is dairy, with thirty percent of total agricultural production is produced for consumption. A fifth of the total is vegetables, while fifteen percent of production is for grain harvesting.

In Western region, on the other hand, considerably more grain is produced, with forty-five percent of total production, three times as many as in the East. Meat is one of the top two most popular products besides grain, with thirty-five percent of production, the same as in Eastern area. There is a difference in percentage of milk products between milk products. Fifteen percent of Western agricultural production is dairy, which is equal to a half of the Eastern dairy amount. A very small part of the total production is for vegetables producing, with only five percent.

In general, each area concentrates on different products. While the agricultural commodities is distributed relatively equaled in the East, Western region seems to prefer grain.

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The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops (improper usage) different major food.

In the East of the country, meat is the most popular (?) product with thirty-five percent of production. The second highest percentage is dairy, with thirty percent of (missing word) total agricultural production is produced for consumption. A fifth of the total is vegetables, while fifteen percent of production is for grain harvesting.

In (missing word) Western region, on the other hand, considerably more grain is produced, with forty-five percent of total production, three times as many as in the East. Meat is one of the top two most popular products besides grain, with thirty-five percent of production, the same as in (missing word) Eastern area. There is a difference in percentage of milk products between milk products. Fifteen percent of Western agricultural production is dairy, which is equal to a half of the Eastern dairy amount. A very small part of the total production is for vegetables producing, with only five percent.

In general, each area concentrates on different products. While the agricultural commodities is distributed relatively equaled (wrong form) in the East, (missing word) Western region (? regions cannot prefer. The farmers and ranchers have to make the decision about how to use their land most effectively. They prefer one product over another.) seems to prefer grain.

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This is my essay for IELTS Writing Task 1. I would be grateful if someone here spends a little time to give me some comments.


IELTS Writing Task 1: Agricultural production



The pie charts compare the production of various agricultural products between two areas of the country. Each region develops different major food.


In the East of the country, meat is the most popular product with thirty-five percent of production. The second highest percentage is dairy, with thirty percent of total agricultural production is produced for consumption. A fifth of the total is vegetables, while fifteen percent of production is for grain harvesting.


In Western region, on the other hand, considerably more grain is produced, with forty-five percent of total production, three times as many as in the East. Meat is one of the top two most popular products besides grain, with thirty-five percent of production, the same as in Eastern area. There is a difference in percentage of milk products between milk products. Fifteen percent of Western agricultural production is dairy, which is equal to a half of the Eastern dairy amount. A very small part of the total production is for vegetables producing, with only five percent.


In general, each area concentrates on different products. While the agricultural commodities is distributed relatively equaled in the East, Western region seems to prefer grain.


(193 words)

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The pie chart illustrates the comparison of the agricultural production in between two different region of the nation (Eastern region as well as western region).

It is clearly observed that,the most popular production of meat,with thirty-five percentage in Eastern region.In addition to, the second large number of production is dairy,approximately (a third) percentage .however,grains has the least amount of production such as less than a fifth. While, the production of the vegetables is a fifth.

On the flip side, there is not any difference in between the percentage of meat in western region. In this area grains has the largest percentage(around less than a half) as it has bottom number of percentage in eastern region.Vegetable has a very small number in western region.

To recapitulate, each area concentrates on different production as we can see, Eastern area has the pick percentage in meat production but western area is more focusing in grains.

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