TOPIC: To deal with unemployment, the government should allow the jobless to work for three days to replace the main staff.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?


There is an argument that the permission of the government to unemployed is replaced the primary workers for 3 days to work, which will help to carry out unemployment. To me personally, I agree with this statement since work has great importance in human life needs to give solutions to this concern are as follows.

First of all, in the context of today's socio-economic development, unemployment has become a global problem, not excluding any country from poor countries to developing or industrialized countries develop. This is concerned so much by the government and most citizens. And I supposed that this issue is a great solution. It helps the committee of the country deal with the jobless problems and creates a chance for people. Equal opportunity by dint that all people have an equal one of jobs and the unemployed lack of jobs not because of their incompetence, but rather another objective reason, such as financial crisis. For example, during the recent covid-19 period, the economy was stagnant, many companies and factories had to close, which also meant that workers lost their jobs and became unemployed, making their lives gradually become more difficult. And work is now extremely necessary for them. Building a society with love, respect, and purpose to give a hand to those in need, means you are creating value for the country.

On the other hand, when having the opportunity to work, the unemployed not only can earn a living and take care of themselves better but also will have enough expenses to pay for their lives. This is a chance for the main staff to have more time off, pursue higher education and vocational training to better skills, and feel refreshed to work more effectively. Besides, building a society with love, make use of redundant labor; create a competitive environment between old and new workers, under significant mental and emotional pressure of competition to try your best và do well. Indeed, this puts many people under various stress, hard work, and effort. Such my brother is a perfect example, he used to attempt so much for his present job. Starting as a trainee among many applicants, he had to try to learn, practice, and compete in the pressure of the environment along with a lot of high standards. It can be seen that the above view has created a new environment for effort so that each individual can do the best he can.

By the way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my opinion that the government should allow the jobless to work for some days to replace the main staff. Only by this solution, unemployed problems will be dealt with.

Thu Giang MaiTOPIC: To deal with unemployment, the government should allow the jobless to work for three days to replace the main staff. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

TOPIC: To deal with unemployment, the government should allow the jobless to work for three days to replace current employees. main staff.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

This is a poor topic. It is not clear. Is the suggestion for three days a month, or three days a year?

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There is an argument that the permission of the government to unemployed is replaced the primary workers (That is poor English. It makes no sense.) for 3 days to work, which will help to carry out (wrong word) unemployment. To me Personally, I agree with this statement since work has great importance in our human life needs to give solutions to this concern are as follows.(ungrammatical. It is not a valid sentence structure.)

First of all, in the context of today's socio-economic situation, development, (wrong word) unemployment has become a global problem, not excluding any country from poor countries to developing or industrialized countries develop. This is a concerned so much by of the government and most citizens. And I supposed (wrong form) that this issue (wrong word) is a great solution. It helps the committee of the country (I don't know what you mean.) deal with the jobless problems and creates a chance for people. Equal opportunity by dint (wrong word) that all people have an equal one of jobs (wrong expression) and the unemployed lack of jobs not because of their incompetence, but rather another objective reason, such as sickness or depression, or an economic downturn. financial crisis. For example, during the recent covid-19 pandemic period, the economy was stagnant, and many companies and factories had to close, which also meant that workers lost their jobs and became unemployed, making their lives gradually become more difficult. And work is now extremely necessary for them. Building a society with love, respect, and purpose and to give a hand to those in need, means you are creating value for the country.

On the other hand, when having the opportunity to work, the unemployed not only can earn a living and take care of themselves better but also will have enough money expenses to pay their expenses. for their lives. This is a chance for the main staff to have more time off, pursue higher education and vocational training to better their skills, and feel refreshed to work more effectively. Besides, building a society with love, make (wrong form) use of redundant labor; create (wrong form) a competitive environment between old and new workers, under significant mental and emotional pressure of competition to try your best và do well. (ungrammatical. It is not a valid sentence structure.) Indeed, this puts many people under various stress, hard work, and effort. Such my brother (Is your brother's name "Such"?) is a perfect example, (comma splice error) he used to attempt so much for work very hard in his present job. Starting as a trainee among many applicants, he had to try to learn, practice, and compete in the pressure of the environment workplace along with a lot of high standards for the quality of the product. It can be seen that the above view has created a new environment for effort (I do not understand this.) so that each individual can do the best he can.

By the way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my opinion that the government should allow the jobless to work for some days to replace the main staff. Only by this solution, unemployment unemployed problems will be dealt with.

Thank you so much for helping me fix this essay. I learned a lot! I'll try harder.