The table shows some details about subterranean rail systems which in six cities around the world.

The table compares the six networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year. It is clear that the three oldest underground systems are larger and serve significantly passengers than newer systems.

The oldest rail track was built in London which is also the longest track compared to other routes in the table. It also carries the third high number of passengers each year, while the number of passengers using underground train systems in Tokyo and Paris is at the highest positions, 1927 persons and 1191 persons respectively.

Three newest systems were smaller and carries less passengers per year than the others. The routes opened in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the newest but the quantities of annual passengers using these routes are significantly less, especially in Kyoto, with only 45 persons each year.

The table shows some details about subterranean (This word is never used for railroads except for those in coal mines.) rail systems which in six cities around the world. (The next sentence should be used as your first paragraph. It repeats what you wrote here.)

The table compares the six urban underground rail systems networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year.


It is clear that (That is an opinion. Do not write opinions in Task 1.) The three oldest underground systems are larger and serve significantly (missing word - "significantly passengers" is incorrect English.) passengers than the newer systems.

The oldest rail track was built in London which is also the longest track (There is more than one track in the system.) compared to other routes in the table. It also carries the third high (wrong form) number of passengers each year, while the number of passengers using underground train systems (You do not need to repeat this. The reader knows what you are talking about.) in Tokyo and Paris is at the highest positions, 1927 persons (That is incorrect.) and 1191 persons respectively.

Three newest systems were (stick to present tense.) smaller and carries less (wrong word) passengers per year than the others. The routes opened in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the newest but the quantities (wrong word) of annual passengers using these routes are significantly less, especially in Kyoto, with only 45 persons each year. (That is less than one person per week! This system should be out of business because only one person in a week uses it!)


Some general points you might think about:

Three of the systems are in capital cities: London, Paris and Tokyo.
Two are in the US, two in Japan, and two (the oldest) in Europe.
The largest system (London) is more than thirty times larger than the smallest (Kyoto) in terms of its route length.

The oldest system is over 150 years old, the newest less than 20 years old.
Tokyo's system is the most congested and Washington's is the least.

Thanks for your help and suggestions. I followed some of those and rewrote it based on them. Please check it again.


The table shows some details about underground rail systems in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year in six cities around the world.

The three oldest underground systems are larger and serve a significant number of passengers than the newer systems.

The oldest railway network was built in London which is also the longest one compared to other routes in the table. It also carries the third highest number of passengers each year, while the number of passengers in Tokyo and Paris is at the highest positions, 1927 million and 1191 million persons respectively.

Three newest systems are smaller and carries fewer passengers per year than the others. The routes opened in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the newest but the number of annual passengers using these routes are significantly less, especially in Kyoto, with only 45 million persons each year.

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The table shows some details about underground rail systems in six cities around the world in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year in six cities around the world. The six cities are: ...

(In the first paragraph, be as complete as possible, but do not mention any data values. In most task 1 exercises, you will write two or even three sentences.)

The three oldest underground systems are larger and serve a more significant number of passengers than the newer systems.

(Avoid paragraphs with only one sentence. Each paragraph will talk about one main point. The point here is "the oldest systems", so you should combine this sentence with the next paragraph. The contrasting paragraph has the point "the newest systems.")

The oldest railway network was built in London and it which is also the longest one compared to others routes in the table. It also carries the third highest number of passengers each year, while the numbers of passengers in Tokyo and Paris are larger is at the highest positions, 1927 million and 1191 million persons respectively.

Three newest systems are smaller and carry carries fewer passengers per year than the others. The routes opened in Kyoto and Los Angeles are the newest and but the number of annual passengers using these routes are significantly less, especially in Kyoto, with only 45 million persons each year.

Thanks for your help!

The given is tabular chart comparing data about subway systems of six mega cities in world.(London, Paris,Tokyo,Washington DC,Kyoto and Los Angeles).Units are measured in years, kilometres and millions.
Overall, The undergrounds were chronologically ordered and distance of them is put in descending order. The table starts with London metro and finished with information about Los Angeles underground railway system. The number of passengers per year is not given like above.
Exactly, metropolitane of London was built in 1863 and it is the oldest, of course the longest line(394 km) among them.This underground system serves to 775 million passengers in each year.
That is the significance, next four subways were opened in XX century, 1900,1927,1976,1981 respectively. The Paris metro line is considered the longest line with 199 km while Kyoto ha only 11 km. But only two of them Paris and Tokyo subway systems can deliver more than thousand people per year. Only Los Angeles underground among them which can serve 50 million users per year was launched in the second year of current century.The length of this line is 28 km.

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