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Brief: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It’s true that a wide range of environmental issues has been heated in recent years. While I tend towards the viewpoint that biodiversity decline is a vital environmental issue, I would have to support the urgency of other natural problems.

On the one hand, it seems that the extinction of some species of flora and fauna is an urgent issue. The main reason for this view is that more and more species of plants and animals are on the edge of disappearing every year because of global warming and human encroachment. The most obvious victim is coral which is at risk for extinction due to the ocean water has grown and more acidic as a result of all the carbon dioxide they have absorbed. Eventually, the loss of biodiversity’s effects pose to mankind a significant threat including the limit access to food resources, clean water, and breathable air.

On the other hand, it can not be denied that the global environment is facing more serious problems. Firstly, rising seas and extreme weather events have been propelled by climate change, causing many regions around the world to devastating consequences. To developing countries’ citizens, people depend heavily on the natural environment, are experiencing an increase in the number of heat-related death. Similarly, air pollution is considered a significant environmental issue with its serious effects. Humans are suffering from a wide range of respiratory diseases from being exposed to contaminated air. In addition, this problem is expected to compound global heating with floods, droughts, and the extinction of many kinds of species.

In conclusion, it seems to me that the loss of biodiversity and other environmental issues including climate change and air pollution are all global vitals problems by their devastating effects.

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It’s true that Our world is facing a wide range variety of environmental challenges nowadays. issues has been heated in recent years. [ 1] These range from pollution of the atmosphere and the associated global warming phenomenon to the depletion of natural resources. While I tend towards the viewpoint some argue that biodiversity decline is a vital the most pressing environmental issue, I would have to support believe the urgency of other natural environmental problems are more critical and urgent.

On the one hand, it seems that the extinction of some species of flora and fauna is an urgent a serious and alarming issue. The main reason for this view is Every day we hear that more and more species of plants and animals are on the edge of disappearing every year because of global warming and human encroachment. The most obvious victim is coral which is at risk of for extinction due to because the ocean water has grown more and more [ 2] acidic as a result of all the carbon dioxide they have it has absorbed. Eventually, the loss of biodiversity ’s effects will pose to mankind a significant threat to mankind, including the limit a reduction in the quality and amount of access to food resources, clean water, and breathable air.

On the other hand, it can not be denied that the global environment is facing more serious problems. Firstly, rising seas and extreme weather events, have been propelled by due to climate change, causing are having many regions around the world to devastating consequences in many regions around the world. To In the vast majority of developing countries, citizens, people depend heavily on the natural environment but are now facing experiencing more frequent and longer droughts, forest fires and desertification. an increase in the number of heat-related death. Similarly, air pollution is considered a significant environmental issue with its serious effects on people’s health. Humans are suffering from a wide range of respiratory diseases from being exposed to contaminated air. In addition, this problem global warming and pollution of the biosphere are is expected to compound global heating with floods, droughts, and other environmental problems, including the extinction of many kinds of species.

In conclusion, it seems to me that the loss of biodiversity is not the most critical and other environmental issue we face. Others, including climate change and air pollution, are all global vitals problems by more urgent due to their devastating effects.

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[ 1]: Try to provide some background information before jumping on to the issue.

[ 2]: “more and more” is okay, but consider “increasingly” as an alternative.