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Writing task 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use.
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
My answer :-
The following pictures illustrates the various stages through which solar panels can be used to absorb and provide electricity for domestic use.
The first picture shows that there is a box possessing a transparent top, two cylindrical shaped pipes protruding in and out of it in alternate positions with one being on the top while the other down in opposite directions.
The second picture portrays that the transparent top absorbs the heat energy coming from the sun while the cool air passes in through the inlet and then exits through the outlet.
The third picture explains that the cool water entered inside is exiting as hot water through a water pipe connected from the inlet to the outlet with the help of the heat energy that the sun produces which falls upon the transparent top and thereby helping in the process.
Therefore the Solar panels absorb the heat energy from the sun and then this energy is partly used in the forcing out the cool water which enters from the inlet through the outlet as hot water and generating electricity.
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Writing task 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows how solar panels can be used to provide electricity for domestic use.
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
My answer :-
The following pictures illustrates the various stages through which solar panels can be used to absorb and provide electricity for domestic use.
The first picture shows that there is a box possessing a transparent top, two cylindrical shaped pipes protruding in and out of it in alternate positions with one being on the top while the other down in opposite directions.
The second picture portrays that the transparent top absorbs the heat energy coming from the sun while the cool air passes in through the inlet and then exits through the outlet.
The third picture explains that the cool water entered inside is exiting as hot water through a water pipe connected from the inlet to the outlet with the help of the heat energy that the sun produces which falls upon the transparent top and thereby helping in the process.
Therefore the Solar panels absorb the heat energy from the sun and then this energy is partly used in the forcing out the cool water which enters from the inlet through the outlet as hot water and generating electricity.
The following (How many?) pictures illustrates the various stages (That is incorrect. This is not a process flow chart. There are no stages or steps on this diagram.) through which solar panels can be used to absorb and provide electricity (That is completely wrong. Solar panels do not absorb electricity. Also, there there are no electric wires on any of these pictures, so how can you write that there is electricity being generated?) for domestic use.
The first picture shows that there is a box possessing with a transparent top, two cylindrical shaped (unnatural. All pipes are long cylinders.) pipes protruding in and out of it in alternate positions with one being on the top (incorrect. The glass panel is on the top. There is no pipe going through the panel.) while the other down leads in the opposite directions.
The second picture portrays that shows the transparent top absorbing the heat energy coming from the sun while the cool air passes in through the inlet (You did not define what the "inlet" is and how it relates to the pipes. Poor coherence and cohesion.) and then exits through the outlet. (You did not define what the "inlet" is and how it relates to the pipes.)
The third picture explains that the shows cool water entering ed inside is and exiting as hot water through a water pipe connected from the inlet to the outlet with the help of the heat energy that the sun produces which falls upon the transparent top and thereby helping in the process.
(That makes no sense. It is very poorly explained.)
Therefore the Solar (No capital letter) panels absorb the heat energy from the sun and then this energy is partly used in the forcing out the cool water which enters from the inlet through the outlet as hot water and generating electricity.
(There is no electricity shown on any of these diagrams. You did not understand this diagram very well. The instructions are defective, illogical, and unscientific. Do not pay any attention to these horrible instructions.
Your essay has very little cohesion and coherence. The paragraphs are too short and choppy. You did not show any relationships between the three pictures.
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This is a schematic diagram of a solar panel that generates electricity for household use.
This type of solar panel is made of a sandwich of two types of silicon. When solar rays strike the exposed side, it excites electrons and causes them to move. This generates electricity to run light bulbs, refrigerators, phone chargers, vacuum cleaners, televisions, and all the different electric appliances in the house.
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RakingboyIs it possible for the tasks be emailed to you directly for evaluation ?
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