Some people believe that it is important for children to attend extra classes outside school, while others believe that they should be allowed to play after school.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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In some regions of the world, children are forced to attend other classes apart from their school learning. There are many debates about whether children should take part in those extra classes or enjoy their leisure time. Although taking extra classes will bring a number of perks for children, I believe that they should be allowed to play after school.
Education is essential for the youngsters so many parents choose to sign up supplementary classes for their children. Especially in some Asian countries, children are made to take a large number of additional classes because it helps them learn more than school does. Hence, it gives them academic advantages to secure better grades at school. Needless to say, they eventually get better grades than their peers while children who don’t attend extra classes often fall behind and might have comparatively poor grades.
However, despite better school performance, extracurricular learning can affect children’s mental health. Take China as an example, sucidal rate is the highest among the young populations as Chinese students suffer from heavy academic burden. They should be allowed to enjoy their lives, hanging out with their friends or spending time with their families since it helps them relieve their stress after school. Additionally, it’s better for children to choose whether to attend extra classes than forcing them to study.
To conclude, even though both views have their own merits, I think it’s necessary for children to be given freedom to play and socialize outside school hours.
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Education is essential for the youngsters, so many parents choose to sign their kids up for supplementary classes. for their children. Especially in some Asian countries, children are made to take a large number of additional classes because it helps them learn more than by just studying at school. does. Hence, it gives them academic advantages to secure better grades, which means they have a better chance of getting into a renowned university and eventually securing a prestigious job. at school. Needless to say, they eventually get better grades than their peers while children who don’t attend extra classes often fall behind and might have comparatively poor grades.
However, despite better school performance, extracurricular learning can affect children’s mental health. Take China as an example, where the youth sucidal suicide rate is among the highest in the world, among the young populations as Chinese students suffer from a heavy academic burden. They should be allowed to enjoy their lives, hanging out with their friends or spending time with their families since it that helps them relieve their stress after school. Additionally, it’s [ 2] it is better for to allow children to choose whether to attend extra classes than forcing them to be forced to study.
To conclude, [ 3] even though extra classes can mean better grades, both views have their own merits, I think it’s necessary for children to be given freedom to play and socialize outside school hours.
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[ 1]: “debate” in that sense is not countable.
[ 2]: Do not use contractions in formal writing.
[ 3]: Do not write a generic conclusion. The conclusion is supposed to be the most specific part of the essay. All you need is a sentence or two that summarize the main points/findings from the body paragraphs.
Finally, please do not write in boldface letters.
book hat 81Needless to say, they eventually get better grades than their peers while children who don’t attend extra classes often fall behind and might have comparatively poor grades.
That's not the only possible reason. Some schools are not good enough so, parents who can afford to, have to arrange private lessons for their children. The alternative would be children getting little or no teaching of some subjects.