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The charts provide information about the amount of sodium, saturated fat and added sugars which comes from meals. Provide an adverse effect on person’s health who consume these too much.
Overall it can be seen that the highest nutrients are sodium and saturated fat for dinner, whereas added sugar makes up the largest percentage of snacks.
Looking at the sodium chart in more details, it is evident that the people consume for this purpose more in the dinner at 43%,which is the largest percentage in the all three categories, followed by lunch at 29%.The lowest percentage made up by snacks and breakfast at 14%.
Turning on the saturated fat, it is clear that 37% of saturated fat consumed by people in dinner. The percentage of saturated fat in lunch and snacks at 26% and 21% respectively, followed closely by breakfast at 16%.Finally, The percentage of added sugar are 42% in snacks. 23% of percentage consume added sugar comes from dinner, followed by lunch and breakfast at 19% and 16% respectively.

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The charts (What kind of charts? Are the Gantt charts, bar charts, org charts or something else? How many charts are there? Two, six or some other number?) provide information about (That is very vague. It does not tell the reader what is plotted on the charts.) the amount of sodium, saturated fat and added sugars which comes from meals. Provide an adverse effect on person’s health who consume these too much.
(Do not write imperative sentences in Task 1 essays. The sentence is not good English. You changed topics, so you need to start a new paragraph here.) ) Overall it can be seen that the highest nutrients are sodium and saturated fat for dinner, whereas added sugar makes up the largest percentage of snacks. (That is not a good statement. It says that the snacks are more than 50% made of sugar.)
Looking at the sodium chart in more details, (Please read my advice. Such phrases are wasting words.) it is evident that the people consume for this purpose more (This is not a good sentence. People consume food because of hunger. There is no "purpose" shown in this figure.) in the dinner at 43%,which is the largest percentage in the all three categories, followed by lunch at 29%.The lowest percentage made up by snacks and breakfast at 14%.
Turning on the saturated fat, (Ungrammatical.) it is clear that 37% of saturated fat consumed (ungrammatical) by people in dinner. The percentage of saturated fat in lunch and snacks at 26% and 21% respectively, (That is not a grammatical sentence. There is no verb. That is incorrect. The charts do not show the percentage of a nutrient in each meal. It is the percentage of daily intake, divided among the four different meals. ) followed closely by breakfast at 16%.Finally, (spacing error) The (Capitalization error) percentage of added sugar are (wrong verb form) 42% in snacks. 23% (Never begin a sentence with a number written in numerals.) of percentage consume added sugar (ungrammatical) comes from dinner, followed by lunch and breakfast at 19% and 16% respectively. (Here, your idea was correct, but you made a lot of grammatical errors.)


Here are two example opening paragraphs:

The three pie charts, one each for sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, depict the proportion of daily intake of these nutrients distributed over four meals, breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks. The data is from the US.
There are three pie charts presenting data on the eating habits of Americans. The first gives the percentage of sodium consumed daily in each of the four meals, the second gives saturated fat, and the third, added sugars. The four meals are breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks.

Here is an example essay that I wrote for another student:

Three pie charts, labelled sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, show the percentage of that nutrient consumed in each of four meals in a typical day. This data is from the average American diet which consists of breakfast, lunch, dinner, and in-between meal snacks.

Overall, Americans get most of their daily intake of saturated fat and sodium in the evening meal. They get their greatest proportion of added sugars from snacks. Breakfast, which contains moderate amounts of these unhealthy nutrients, is the healthiest meal.

In the first pie chart, sodium, dinner has the largest fraction of daily consumption at 43%, followed by lunch with 29%. A similar pattern is seen in the second pie chart (saturated fat) with dinner having the largest proportion (37%) followed by lunch (26%). Snacks contribute only 14% of sodium, and about a fifth of the saturated fats. The remaining percentages are consumed in the breakfast meal.

The consumption of added sugars has a substantially different distribution, with nearly half (42%) in snacks, and the rest rather evenly distributed over dinner, lunch and breakfast, 23%, 19% and 16% respectively.

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The pie charts provide information about the proportions of three potentially unhealthy nutrients that come from four sorts of meals in the USA.

Overall, it can be seen that dinner contains the highest levels of sodium and saturated fat; whereas snacks contain the highest amounts of added sugar. Generally, It would appear (seem) that breakfast is the healthiest meal in the USA.

Looking at the sodium pie chart in more detail, it is evident that the highest percentage of sodium comes from dinner, at 43%, compared to 29% from lunch and 14% for both breakfast and snacks.

Turning to the saturated fat chart, it is clear that the percentage of total fat, which comes from dinner, is also the highest, at 37%. Further, 26% of saturated fat comes from lunch, as opposed to 21% and 16% from snacks and breakfast respectively.

Finally, the added sugar chart shows that the largest percentage of added sugar comes from, at %42. Dinner contributes 23% of total added sugar, and lunch contributes 19%. The lowest proportion of added sugar comes from breakfast, at 16%.


What do you think about that sir? because this one was written by an ex-IELTS examiner

Murtaza BilirWhat do you think about that sir?
Murtaza Biliradded sugar comes from, at %42.

You must have copied that incorrectly.

It is a good essay, but I find some niggling issues.

First, it is too verbose. In university-level writing, writers need to be succinct and clear, and use the fewest words to express the idea.

Second, the paragraphs are rather choppy and do not flow as well as they could.

Finally, the language is not completely neutral, with some implications of conclusions or opinions sprinkled in ("It would appear").

The purpose of Task 1, as I understand it, is to convey visual information shown in an infographic as objectively in words as possible. The student is expected to select only the main features and some interesting comparisons and not write about every detail. The target readership is a university lecturer, I assume in a discipline such as engineering, science or math.

So the vocabulary words for Task 1 are rather specialized and focused in comparison to Task 2. Task 2 is an argumentative essay, where the range of expression can be very wide. As the essayist, you are trying convince and persuade; whereas in Task 1, you are only reporting facts.

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The purpose of Task 1, as I understand it, is to convey visual information shown in an infographic as objectively in words as possible. The student is expected to select only the main features and some interesting comparisons and not write about every detail.


I totally agree with you


But I've just started to my IELTS journey that was my third attempts to write a full essay so I have to follow someone then some of my friends recommend to me that ex-examiner courses, after that I've bought it try to write a more and more easy. As I beginner, I have to imitate my teacher easy then I'll find my way for writing, by the way, thanks for evaluated my essay I really appreciated and I think we're a colleague for electrical engineering


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