# IELTS_WRITING TASK 1 - The Graph Shows Three Different Crimes In England And Wales From 1970 To 2005?

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The line graph illustrates the comparison of three different categories of crime in England and Wales between 1970 and 2005.

Overall, the crime rates of car theft and house burglary increased markedly in the middle years of the period shown whilst there was a slight fluctuation in the figure for street robbery throughout the stage.

The car theft crime rating, which rose swiftly during the first 25 years, dropped back to 1 millions in the last years surveyed. Although the figure of car theft experienced a plunge, it kept the first place in 2005. Also, the figure of house burglary had an upward trend to reach a peak at 0.5 millions and then descended gradually to 0.36 millions. Unlike the crime rates of car theft and house burglary, the figure of street robbery made no difference at all. The number of street robbery crimes hovered around 0.05 millions over the whole period.

In conclusion, the rankings of three different crime groups have not changed as compared to the first years of the whole period. Car theft and house burglary were the main criminal groups in England and Wales while street robbery was the lowest.

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The line graph illustrates (Wrong word. "Illustrate" means "make a picture." Use this verb for maps, flow charts, and other diagrams. Do not use it for data plots: bar charts, pie charts and graphs.) the comparison of compares the numbers of three different categories of crimes in England and Wales between 1970 and 2005. (Incomplete. What are the three crimes?)

Overall, the crime rates (Wrong expression. The numbers, not rates, are plotted. Crime rate would have a normalizing divisor, for example, 56 burglaries per 10,000 population. ) number of car thefts and house burglaries increased markedly in the middle years of the period shown whilst there was a slight fluctuation (Wrong word. ) in the number of figure (Wrong word. ) for street robberies throughout the stage. (Wrong word. )

The number of car thefts crime rating, (Wrong expression. ) which rose swiftly during the first 25 years, dropped back to 1 millions (Wrong form. ) in the last ten years surveyed. Although the figure (Wrong word. ) of car theft experienced (Wrong word. ) a plunge, (Wrong word. ) it kept the first place in 2005. Also, the number figure (Wrong word. ) of house burglaries had an upward trend from 1970 to 1990, reaching to reach a peak at 0.5 millions (Wrong form) and then descended gradually to 0.36 millions. (Wrong form). Unlike the numbers crime rates of car thefts and house burglaries, the figure (Wrong word. ) of street robbery made no difference at all. (Wrong expression.This means that is was not important to the lives of people.) The number of street robbery crimes remained relatively constant at hovered around 0.05 millions (Wrong form. ) over the whole period.

In conclusion, (Do not write a conclusion paragraph in Task 1. That is necessary in Task 2. Put this information in the "overview" paragraph, the second paragraph.) the rankings of three different crimes did not change during groups have not changed as compared to the first years of the whole period. Car theft and house burglary were the most common main criminal groups in England and Wales while street robbery was the least common. lowest.

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