Task 1: The chart below shows the annual rice production in 4 countries in 1995, 2005, 2015
Given is the bar chart elucidating the yearly rice yield in four different nations in a period of two decades from 1995 to 2015.
It can be seen from the data provided that while country A led the group in terms of rice production, the yield was relatively insignificant in the cases of country C and D. Also, throughout the surveyed period, different tendencies were recorded in the annual rice production of the four nations.
In 1995, the leading position was captured by nation A with roughly 45 million tonnes in rice production, followed by that of country B with about 10 million tonnes less. Meanwhile, 5 million tonnes and 2 million tonnes were respectively the amount of rice cultivated in country C and D in this same year.
The following decade witnessed a staggering rise in nation B’s rice production as its figure reached a pinnacle at 47 million tones, equalling that of country A at the top spot. The only nation which revealed no change in its rice yield was country D.
In the last year surveyed, there were mixed trends in the yearly rice production from the four nations. Specifically, as the continued growth in production secured country A’s first place at 50 million tonnes, the sudden drop kept nation B at the second place with about 8 million tonnes less. During the same period, country C and D tied at the bottom of the list with a similar 5 million tonnes in annual rice yield, being only a tenth of that of country A.
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Task 1: The chart below shows the annual rice production in 4 countries in 1995, 2005, 2015
Given is the bar chart elucidating the yearly rice yield in four different nations in a period of two decades from 1995 to 2015.
It can be seen from the data provided that while country A led the group in terms of rice production, the yield was relatively insignificant in the cases of country C and D. Also, throughout the surveyed period, different tendencies were recorded in the annual rice production of the four nations.
In 1995, the leading position was captured by nation A with roughly 45 million tonnes in rice production, followed by that of country B with about 10 million tonnes less. Meanwhile, 5 million tonnes and 2 million tonnes were respectively the amount of rice cultivated in country C and D in this same year.
The following decade witnessed a staggering rise in nation B’s rice production as its figure reached a pinnacle at 47 million tones, equalling that of country A at the top spot. The only nation which revealed no change in its rice yield was country D.
In the last year surveyed, there were mixed trends in the yearly rice production from the four nations. Specifically, as the continued growth in production secured country A’s first place at 50 million tonnes, the sudden drop kept nation B at the second place with about 8 million tonnes less. During the same period, country C and D tied at the bottom of the list with a similar 5 million tonnes in annual rice yield, being only a tenth of that of country A.
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Given is (not good) The bar chart elucidating (poor word choice. It does not make sense) compares / plots / shows / gives the yearly rice yield (Yield is not used in the same context as "production." Yield is used when comparing the amount produced per unit area of land. It is for comparing the fertility of land. For example, fertilization improves the yield. ) in four different nations (Which nations?) in 1995, 2005 and 2015. a period of two decades from 1995 to 2015. ("Period" is more for line graphs with continuous data. The bar chart has three data points. )
It can be seen from the data provided that (Those words are useless. Just write a report about the information. Avoid "filler" words. Concentrate on communicating the data content. ) Overall, while country A led the group in terms of rice production, the yield was relatively insignificant in the cases of country C and D. Also, throughout the surveyed period, (Do not use "surveyed" unless there is a survey mentioned in the instructions. A survey is when people answer questions on a form. "Throughout" is used for continuous data, not discrete time points. ) different tendencies were recorded (That gives no information at all. ) in the annual rice production of the four nations.
In 1995, the leading position was captured by nation A with roughly 45 million tonnes in rice production, followed by that of country B with about 10 million tonnes less. Meanwhile, 5 million tonnes and 2 million tonnes were respectively the amount of rice cultivated (wrong word. You are making a big mistake if you try to use synonyms in task 1. Task 1 is for maths and science reporting. Precision and accuracy are vital. Synonyms rarely have the exact same meaning. You will confuse the reader with synonyms. That is not good for your score. ) in country C and D in this same year.
The following decade witnessed (poor word choice. Only people can see, witness and experience things. Inanimate objects cannot) a staggering (Do not use "drama" words. Be neutral and objective. Besides, the increase was less than 40%; staggering would be ten times as much.. ) rise in nation B’s rice production as its figure ("Figure" is not a good word for Task 1. It means data only in very limited contexts.) reached a maximum value of pinnacle at 47 million tones, equalling that of country A at the top spot. The only nation which revealed had / showed no change in its rice yield was country D.
In the last year surveyed, there were mixed trends (wrong word. A trend is only for continuous data. This sentence has very little information content. ) in the yearly rice production from the four nations. Specifically, as the continued growth in production secured country A’s first place at 50 million tonnes, the sudden drop kept nation B at the second place with about 8 million tonnes less. During the same period, country C and D tied at the bottom of the list with a similar 5 million tonnes in annual rice yield, being only a tenth of that of country A.
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Thanks for your timely response! Besides the word choice issue, would you have any comments regarding my use of grammar, graph interpretation or transition between sentences/ paragraph?
Your word choices and wordy writing completely obscures the interpretation of the chart data and the coherence and cohesion.
Task 1 is graded on your following the instructions. The key words are "summary" (not detail), "Main features" and "comparisons".
Put the "main features" in a separate paragraph, so the examiner knows your analysis. There are two or three elements that stand out. Avoid putting in specific data values. Use your calculator - it will be handy.
Put some comparisons in a separate detail paragraph. Usually one paragraph is sufficient.
How similar or different are these countries in terms of producing rice?
In this bar chart, there are not many data values, three values for each of four countries, 12 in all. There are three totals, 1995, 2005 and 2015.
So immediately think about adding them together to get and compare relative contributions of the four countries. Also look at the big picture of patterns for the countries so you can group them together.
Reduce annoying repetition by giving an abbreviation for the units of measure in the opening paragraph.
Sample essay (~ 175 words)
The bar chart compares four countries (A, B, C, and D) in terms of their annual rice production in 1995, 2005 and 2015. The unit of measure is millions of tonnes (MT.)
Overall, the bulk of the combined total was from the two major producers, countries A and B. The amounts produced by countries A and D tended to increase over time, whereas the other two, B and C, showed a clear maximum in 2005.
In detail, added together, production from all four nations was 89 MT in 1995, which was less than in 2005 and 2015, 107 and 102 MT. At each time point, approximately nine-tenths came from countries A and B. A was the top producer in both 1995 and 2015, exceeding B by a noticeable margin (44 versus 36 MT and 50 versus 42 MT). But their amounts were equal in 2005, at 48 MT (45% of the total). In contrast, countries C and D contributed very minor amounts, ranging between 3 and 7 MT, or 8 to 9% of the total at each data point.
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