With the emergence of new technological advancements, they are expected to represent alternatives that facilitate human lives. However, many have argued that this phenomenon has actually driven our life into a more complicated and hectic path, thus making them inventions that should be eliminated. This essay, by indicating several benefits brought about by technology, disagrees with that statement to argue that technology should be here to stay, otherwise there may be grave consequences.

First and foremost, there have been numerous benefits brought about by technology, thus making life easier. To begin with, technological inventions have made it increasingly convenient for users by assisting them in every aspect of life. Grocery shopping, studying, entertaining or working are just one click away, allowing people to complete a myriad of tasks simultaneously. Furthermore, technology has made significant progress in saving lives, leading to their indispensable role in the medical field. Particularly, during the Covid-19 epidemic, doctors and scientists have heavily depended on technological assistance to identify appropriate vaccines and treatments for the prevention of the virus.

Another compelling reason for keeping technology in use involves the far-reaching consequences that humans would encounter in its absence. In times when natural disasters and armed conflicts are taking place around the world, the lack of technological tools to provide support for the vulnerable may push their lives into a desperate direction, causing global chaos. In addition, although many argue that the use of technology has made life growingly hectic, it is believed that if technology no longer exists, people may never be that informed and aware. Since technology enables education and information to be available to people of different backgrounds in every corner of the globe, the elimination of technology can damage people’s capability to enhance their knowledge.

In conclusion, the use of technology has grown significantly in popularity for the fact that it provides users with convenience and assists human wellbeing. Even though many people consider it to cause a complicated life, the disappearance of technology may lead to an even more chaotic life.

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Some hold the idea that technology is making people's lives too complicated. Therefore, we ought to make life easier by not using technology. Do you agree or disagree?


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Another compelling reason for keeping these systems technology in use involves the far-reaching consequences that humans we would encounter in its absence. In times when natural disasters and armed conflicts are taking place around the world, the lack of technological tools (I do not know what your mean here. Are you talking about aid sent by airplanes?) to provide support for the vulnerable may push their lives into a desperate direction, causing global chaos. (That does not make sense.) In addition, although many argue that the use of new technology has made life growingly hectic, it is believed that if technology no longer exists, people may never be that informed and aware. (I have no idea what you mean. Are you talking about the Internet, smartphones, radio, television or communication networks? Be specific. "Technology" is a very broad term.) Since the internet technology enables education and information to be available to people of different backgrounds in every corner of the globe, the elimination of technology can its elimination would damage people’s capability to enhance their knowledge.

In conclusion, the use of the internet and information technology technology has grown significantly in popularity for the fact that it provides users with convenience and assists human our wellbeing. Even though many people consider it to cause a complicated life, the its disappearance of technology may lead to an even more chaotic life.


Comment: People have been inventing new technologies for hundreds of thousands of years, so you have to be specific in what you are talking about. See this presentation slide as an illustration. Stone tools were superseded by bronze tools which were superseded by iron tools and then by steel and aluminum. These are all advancing technologies. The tribes with the superior weapons based on better technology defeated other tribes.


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The real problem is not your writing, but that the topic was not written by a native speaker or someone who knows about IELTS essays.. It is not good English, and the proposition is utterly preposterous.