Hello everyone,

I'm from Vietnam and I'm going to take the IELTS exam in the next two months. I'm studying by myself, so I really appreciate anyone correcting and enhancing my writing essay. Thank you very much.

Here is my essay.

The planet’s population is reaching unsustainable levels, and people are facing shortage of resources like water, food and fuel.

To what consequences may overpopulation lead?

In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation.


The population of the world has rapidly increased in the last couple of decades. This leads to numerous severe consequences which affect directly to the life quality of the middle-class and especially the poor.

Overpopulatoin results in many social problems of the modern world. Shortage of natural resources, such as food, drink, fuel,… is one of them. Those resources are all limited, which means the more the population augments, the more people will not be ensured the minimal conditions for life. For instance, thousands of African children are starving, or millions of people in developing countries do not have clean water for cooking and washing. Besides, the number of public buidings cannot reach the augmentation of the population. Patients lie on the floor in the hospital because there are not enough beds, students study in crowded classes, or children do not have any playground. Uneducated children will become potential criminals in the future, and the young generations will only stick their eyes on technology equipments instead of exploring the real world.

Myriad measures have been performed all over the world to inhibit population explosion. In China, the government exhibited a law of restriction the number of children in a family, that is, every married couple can have at most one child. If the second child is born, the parents will be liable to a heavy fine. However, despite any attempt, the population will still increase. Therefore, the government needs to instantly build more schools, hospitals, parks,… as a long-term solution for overpopulation.

Overpopulation is not a problem of any nation but all countries. As a consequence, every nation has to join their hands to protect the world from overpopulation.

The population of the world has rapidly increased in the last couple of decades. (Actually, the growth rate peaked in 1962. The population growth has been over hundreds of years, not decades. The first essay which recognized the underlying cause and its consequences was written by Malthus,1798, titled "An Essay on the Principle of Population". ) This leads to numerous severe consequences which affect directly to the life quality (wrong phrasing) of the middle-class and especially the poor.

Overpopulatoin results in many social problems of the modern world. Shortage of natural resources, such as food, drink, (Drink can be things like soda, wine, or milk. These are not natural resources.) fuel,… (Do not use ellipses or "etc." in formal writing.) is one of them. Those resources are all limited, which means the more the population augments, the more people will not be ensured the minimal conditions for life. For instance, thousands of African children are starving, or millions of people in developing countries do not have clean water for cooking and washing. Besides, the number of public buidings cannot reach the augmentation of the population. Patients lie on the floor in the hospital because there are not enough beds, students study in crowded classes, or children do not have any playground. Uneducated children will become potential criminals (A potential criminal does not commit any crimes. There is no harm to society from potential criminals. ) in the future, and the young generations will only stick their eyes on technology equipments (wrong form) (What does technology addiction have to do with global overpopulation?) instead of exploring the real world.

Myriad measures have been performed all over the world to inhibit population explosion. In China, the government exhibited (wrong word) a law of restriction (wrong form) the number of children in a family, that is, every married couple can have at most one child. If the second child is born, the parents will be liable to a heavy fine. However, despite any attempt, the population will still increase. Therefore, the government needs to instantly build more schools, hospitals, (missing words) parks,… as a long-term solution for overpopulation. (That is not the most important problem for overpopulation.)

Overpopulation is not a problem of any nation but all countries. As a consequence, every nation has to join their hands to protect the world from overpopulation.

Thank you AlpheccaStars for your correction.

Could you give me some hints for replacement of the "wrong form" words you highlighted?

Moreover, what are the mistakes of "shortage", "buildings", "augments" and "augmentation" in my essay?

Thank you so much once again.

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tienkhashortage

If there is a shortage of food, a shortage of water and a shortage of fuel, there is more than one shortage, isn't there?

tienkhabuildings

Look closely - you wrote "buidings" not buildings.

tienkhaaugments

That is not the natural use of this word. I have never seen it used in the context of population.

Population can grow, increase, or expand.

tienkhaaugmentation

This sentence does not make any sense.

Besides, the number of public buildings cannot reach the augmentation of the population.

Here are some options:

There will not be enough buildings to accommodate a growing population.
The existing buildings will be overwhelmed by the demands of so many more people.
The existing infrastructure (public buildings and services) will be inadequate to handle the needs of a larger population.

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