IComputers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

As the matter of fact, computers are recently known as the crucial gadgets in the comtemporary world.In education, they are considered to be the electronic equipments which are critical in classroom.Despite the optimal functions in education, there are a numberous detriments in education for students.Both of sides including my views are displayed.in this paragraph.

With the multy-function of computers, students do not feel tricky to widen their horrizontal even finding solutions for their lesson issues.The fact that they normally access the websites which consist of the enormous number of documents or files that might mean to their education in the wireless hotspots instead of spending time finding in the library as the conventional searching way.For instance,it is the fact that they are possibly exhausted with the conventional education methods and the majority of them are keen on online lectures on the internet which are published on educational websites and e-lectures which are prepared by their lecturers or teachers.With the online lectures,they possibly learn at home or areas with the wireless network and they might attend to schools or universities.The e-lectures therefore attract their attention with the digital editing.It means that the lectures not only consist of documents or informations but also videos,images which are known as be actually effective in teaching.

In contrast,there are several problems from computers in education.Students could get the diseases relating to vision if they took long time for watching the electronic screen.Moreover, it can lead to the fact that they could feel monotonous to study in class and they prefer studying individually instead of studying during the class.Therefore, it is the fact that there is the modest number of students going to university for learning.

In conclusion, although there are a lot of problems relating to educating by computers for students, educating by computer is known as the phenomenal methods which is widespread all over the world.However, it is actually vital for modernizing education plans where students are able to learn effectively.

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As the matter of fact, computers are recently known (wrong expression) as the crucial gadgets (wrong word) in the comtemporary world.In education, they are considered to be the electronic equipments (wrong form) which are critical in (missing word) classroom.Despite the optimal functions in education, there are a numberous detriments in education for students.Both of sides including my views are displayed.in this paragraph.

(Improper thesis statement. NEVER mention your essay or paragraphs in a thesis statement. State the main point you are going to argue. For example,

"I believe it is inevitable that computers will be in every classroom. Eventually, empathetic robot teachers, based on artificial intelligence programming, will be the teachers of the future generations without any risk to the students. ")


With the multy-function of computers, students do not feel tricky (wrong word) to widen their horrizontal even finding solutions for their lesson issues.The fact that they normally access the websites which consist of the enormous number of documents or files that might mean to their education in the wireless hotspots instead of spending time finding in the library as the conventional searching way.For instance,it is the fact that they are possibly exhausted with the conventional education methods and the majority of them are keen on online lectures on the internet which are published on educational websites and e-lectures which are prepared by their lecturers or teachers.With the online lectures,they possibly learn at home or areas with the wireless network (Off-topic. Te topic is about computers in the classroom, not learning online at home. or in a library.) and they might attend to schools or universities.The e-lectures therefore attract their attention with the digital editing.It means that the lectures not only consist of documents or informations but also videos,images which are known as be actually effective in teaching.

In contrast,there are several problems from computers in education.Students could get the diseases (Disease is an illness caused by a virus or bacteria. VIsion problems are not diseases.) relating to vision if they took long time for watching the electronic screen.Moreover, it can lead to the fact that they could feel monotonous to study in class and they prefer studying individually instead of studying during the class.Therefore, it is the fact that there is the modest number of students going to university for learning.

In conclusion, although there are a lot of problems relating to educating by computers for students, educating by computer is known as the phenomenal methods which is widespread all over the world.However, it is actually vital for modernizing education systems by which plans where students are able to learn effectively.

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