The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table compares the percentage of six different kinds of families who lived in poor condition in Australia in 1999
It is clear that the people living alone suffered a more difficult condition than the couple. Poverty rates of elderly people had significantly lower than the younger people. Aged couples were living in the better condition than the other.
The percentage of all family types was 11%(1,837,000). Old people who lived with partners were the least poor condition, at 4% and a bit higher in this figure for aged people living alone, at 6%.
The poverty rate of single parents was 21%(232,000) and it also was highest. Meanwhile, the proportion of couples with children was half lower just at 12%. Just a small number of couples without children were living in the low quality, at 7% (211,000), while this figure for singles no children was more than approximately three times, at 19%.

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Your word length is barely over the minimum. I recommend that you write a litte more to give you a cushion. There is no penalty for writing over the minimum amount. You have many phrases which are not appropriate.


The table compares the percentage of six different kinds of families who lived in poor condition (incorrect phrase) in Australia in 1999 (Missing punctuation. What are the six different kinds of families? You should write something about this in the opening paragraph. Also, the table gives more information that the percent living in poverty. If you don't define what it is, you will greatly confuse the reader.)


It is clear that the people living alone suffered a more difficult condition (Incorrect expression) than the couple. (Which couple are you talking about?) Poverty rates of elderly people had (wrong verb) significantly lower than the younger people. Aged couples were living in the better condition (incorrect phrase) than the other. (The other what?)
The percentage of (wrong word) all family types was 11%(1,837,000). Old people who lived with partners were the least poor condition, (incorrect phrase) at 4% and a bit higher than that of in this figure for aged people living alone, at 6%.
The poverty rate of single parents was 21%(232,000) and it also was highest of all the age groups. Meanwhile, the proportion of couples with children was half lower (incorrect phrase) just at 12%. Just a small number of couples without children were living in the low quality, at 7% (211,000), while the percentage this figure for singles with no children was more than approximately three times (missing word - three times what value?) , at 19%.

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The first thing I want to say thank you. I haven’t understood your idea yet so I hope you can explain why?

+Poverty rates of elderly people had (wrong verb), Aged couples were living in the better condition(incorrect phrase), +suffered a more difficult condition (Incorrect expression), the least poor condition, (incorrect phrase), half lower (incorrect phrase), The percentage of (wrong word) : what words I can use ? and Why are they wrong?

+ “six different kinds of families” I just want to paraphrase from family type or ‘different categories of families’ and ‘poor condition’ from ‘poverty’

+(Which couple are you talking about?): the couple means aged couple, the couple no children and couple with children in the table

+ the other (The other what?): the other mean things that remain in the table

KaitranWhy are they wrong?

Most of the phrases are wrong because they are not appropriate descriptions of what is in the table.
Task 1 requires an accurate scientific description of the information. Using a variety of expressions that have different and overlapping meanings would not be acceptable to a math or science professor. Science writing must be exact, precise, neutral and objective.

In Task 2, you can be emotional, expressive and use literary devices. The range of expression is highly valued in Task 1, but not in Task 1.

Kaitran+(Which couple are you talking about?): the couple means aged couple, the couple no children and couple with children in the table

In English "the" + singular noun means one specific instance. For example, "Let's go to the cinema." refers to a particular place that you and the reader understand.
"The couple" refers to one specific instance of a pair of people.

KaitranPoverty rates of elderly people had (wrong verb)

The verb "have" is not the right verb for your sentence.

 Poverty rates of elderly people had lower than the younger people. 

There are two alternatives:

Poverty rates of elderly people were lower than the younger people's.
Poverty rates of elderly people had lower values than the younger people's.

Model essay:

Paragraph 1: describe the table contents, but not the data in it.

The table gives the percentages and numbers of families who lived below the poverty line in Australia in 1999. The families are divided into six different categories by age, marital status and the presence of children in the household.

Paragraph 2: give two or three most significant observations about the data:

Overall, the poverty rate (percent living in poverty) was just over a tenth for the whole population, but there were significant differences between the different family types, which had percentages ranging from 4% to 21%. The numbers per household type also had a large range, from 48,000 to 933,000. The most numerous group (couples with children) stood out as being in the middle of the poverty range, at 12%, a bit over the national average. They accounted for about half of the total, 933 thousand out of 1.837 million.

Paragraph 3: Give some interesting details about the data. It is best to make comparisons rather than just copy numbers from the table.

Aside from the couples with children, the groups fall into two distinct categories: high poverty rates and low poverty rates. The groups with the lowest proportion of poor people were elderly single people (6%), elderly couples (4%), and childless couples (7%). These groups amounted to 313,000, or about 17% of the total. The two groups with the highest values were singles with no children (19%) and single parents (21%). There were nearly 600 thousand people in these two groups, or about a third of the total.

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thank you very much, I really appreciate your help

By the way, could you give me some feedback about my friend's writing thank you so much

The table gives information about poverty rates among six types of household in Australia in the year 1999.
It is noticeable that levels of poverty were higher for single people than for couples, and people with children were more likely to be poor than those without. Poverty rates were considerably lower among elderly people.
Overall, 11% of Australians, or 1,837,000 people, were living in poverty in 1999. Aged people were the least likely to be poor, with poverty levels of 6% and 4% for single aged people and aged couples respectively.
Just over one fifth of single parents were living in poverty, whereas only 12% of parents living with a partner were classed as poor. The same pattern can be seen for people with no children: while 19% of single people in this group were living below the poverty line, the figure for couples was much lower, at only 7%.

Kaitran

By the way, could you give me some feedback about my friend's writing thank you so much

The table gives information about poverty rates among six types of household in Australia in the year 1999.
It is noticeable that levels of poverty were higher for single people than for couples, and people with children were more likely to be poor than those without. Poverty rates were considerably lower among elderly people.
Overall, 11% of Australians, or 1,837,000 people, were living in poverty in 1999. Aged people were the least likely to be poor, with poverty levels of 6% and 4% for single aged people and aged couples respectively.
Just over one fifth of single parents were living in poverty, whereas only 12% of parents living with a partner their children were classed as poor. The same pattern can be seen for people with no children: while 19% of single people in this group were living below the poverty line, the figure for couples was much lower, at only 7%.

Your friend writes very well. I have a few comments.


The table gives information about the poverty rates among six types of household in Australia in the year 1999. (Write another sentence about the types of households. Also mention the numbers in the table as well as percentages.)


It is noticeable that The levels of poverty were higher for single people than for couples, and people with children were more likely to be poor than those without. Poverty rates were considerably lower among elderly people.
Overall, 11% of Australians, or 1,837,000 people, were living in poverty in 1999. Aged people were the least likely to be poor, with poverty levels of 6% and 4% for single aged people and aged couples respectively.
Just over one fifth of single parents were living in poverty, whereas only 12% of parents living with their children a partner were classified as poor. The same pattern can be seen for people with no children: while 19% of single people in this group were living below the poverty line, the percentage figure for couples was much lower, at only 7%.

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