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Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?


It is sometimes thought that people are paying too much heed and reserves to the preservation of wildlife. I personally agree with this statement, and I argue that other major sectors deserve more resource and attention.


There are several reason why wildlife protection is a pervasive matter of concern. Firstly, scores of organizations worldwide have been established to protect wild animals, and these groups require large budget to effectively operate. Secondly, animal protection receives wide media coverage. News about endangered species is transferred on the Internet at an unprecedented speed and scale. Facebook, for example, even has to impose restrictions on posting as a large number of news items are of unknown origin and so can deceive readers. Finally, governments have allocated a large sum of budget on the investment of wildlife parks, zoos, with the expense coming from the training of zookeepers, conservationists. They are expensive to instruct, and facilities and equipment also come at a huge cost to the authority.


I believe that attention and funds should be diverted to other major areas. It is much cheaper to train doctors, soldier and teachers and workers of other sectors than it is to train zookeepers and conservationists. Furthermore, worker of these areas do their jobs that have a direct impact on every members of society. For example, we all use school, hospital, and we all need the protection that soldiers provide. Finally, if government reallocates the money spent on wild animals and birds, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty and therefore given a better quality of life.


In conclusion, my view is that we are focusing too much on the safeguard of wild animals and birds and I believe other sectors which benefit everyone should have the resource they need.

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It is sometimes thought that people are paying too much heed and reserves (wrong word) to the preservation of wildlife. I personally agree with this statement, and I argue that other major problem areas sectors deserve more resources and attention.


There are several reason (wrong form) why wildlife protection is a pervasive matter of significant concern. Firstly, First, scores of organizations worldwide have been established to protect wild animals, and these groups require a large budget to effectively operate. Secondly, Second, animal protection receives wide media coverage. News about endangered species is transferred (wrong word) posted on the Internet to many websites, including newspapers, Wikipedia and social media. at an unprecedented speed and scale. (That makes no sense.) Facebook, for example, even has to impose restrictions on posting as a large number of news items are of unknown origin and so can deceive readers. (That is off topic. It makes no sense.) Finally, governments have allocated a large sum (wrong word. Budget is not money. ) proportion of their annual budget on the investment in of wildlife parks, zoos, (missing conjunction) including the salaries of the with the expense coming from the training of zookeepers, conservationists. (missing conjunction) They are expensive to instruct, (unnatural) Their continual training is expensive and facilities and equipment also come at a large huge ("Huge" is a juvenile word. Learn more appropriate academic words.) cost to the authority.


I believe that attention and funds should be diverted to other major areas. It is much cheaper to train doctors, soldier (wrong form) (comma) and teachers and workers of other sectors than it is to train zookeepers and conservationists. (Please explain why this is. Doctors require 10 years of schooling - university, medical school and then residency - beyond high school. Teachers require a master's degree in education. A zookeeper can get employment with an inexpensive two-year degree at a community college. ) Furthermore, worker (wrong form) of these areas (Zookeepers? "These" refers to the closest preceding noun, which is zookeepers and conservationists. It does not refer to doctors, soldiers and teachers.) do their jobs that have a direct impact on every members (wrong form) of society. For example, we all use school, (wrong form) hospital, (wrong form also missing conjunction) and we all need the protection that soldiers provide. Finally, if government reallocates the money spent on wild animals and birds, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty and therefore given a better quality of life.

In conclusion, my view is that we are focusing too much on the safeguard of wild animals and birds and I believe other sectors which benefit everyone should have the resource (wrong form) they need.


Budget is not money. A budget is a plan for money. It has income and expenses in certain categories that cover everything you will pay for.

Before the beginning of a month, you make a budget for that month. Write down how much money you get and how much you will spend. A government budget is much more complicated than a student's budget, but the principles are the same.

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Biên PhạmSome people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Please copy the instructions accurately. It is "extent" not "extend."


It is sometimes thought that people are paying too much heed to the preservation of wildlife. I personally agree (You did not express the extent or degree of your agreement. Use an adverb of extent.) with this statement, and I argue that other major problem areas should deserve more resources and attention.

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Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes thought that people are paying too much heed to the preservation of wildlife. I personally agree with this statement, and I argue that other major problem areas should deserve more resources and attention.

There are several reasons why wildlife protection is a matter of significant concern. First, a large number of organizations worldwide have been established to protect wild animals and birds, and these groups require a large budget to effectively operate. Second, the conservation of wild animals receives wide media coverage. News about endangered species is posted on the Internet to many websites, including newspaper, Wikipedia and social networking sites. Finally, governments have allocated a large proportion of their annual budget on the investment in wildlife parks, zoos, including the salaries of the zookeepers, conservationists. Their continual training is expensive and facilities and equipment also come at a large cost.

I believe that attention and funds should be diverted to other major areas. In the midst of COVID-19 pandemic, the expenditure from government would be of great use if it is alloted to clinical trials to develop vaccines and proper treatment to this virus, which could possibly save thoudsands of lives. In terms of education, because of its vital nature, more funding should be granted to this field instead of animal conservation. As a result, society will benefit from a well-educated workforce which is unattainable without a proper education system. Furthermore, if the states reallocate the money spent on wild animals and birds, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty and therefore given a better quality of life.

In conclusion, my view is that we are focusing too much on the safeguard of wild animals and birds and I believe other sectors which benefit everyone should have the resources they need.

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There are several reasons why wildlife protection is a matter of significant concern. First, a large number of organizations worldwide have been established to protect wild animals and birds, and these groups require a large budget to effectively operate. Second, the conservation of wild animals receives wide media coverage. News about endangered species is posted on the Internet to many websites, including newspapers, Wikipedia and social networking sites. Finally, governments have allocated a large proportion of their annual budget to on the investment in wildlife parks, zoos, including the salaries of the zookeepers and conservationists. Their continual training is expensive and facilities and equipment also come at a large cost.

I believe that attention and funds should be diverted to other major areas. In the midst of the COVID-19 pandemic, the expenditure from government would be of great use if it is alloted to clinical trials to develop test new vaccines and proper treatments for this disease virus, which could possibly save thoudsands of lives. In terms of education, because of its vital nature, more funding should be granted to this field instead of animal conservation. As a result, society will benefit from a well-educated workforce which is unattainable without a proper education system. Furthermore, if the states reallocate the money spent on wild animals and birds, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty and therefore given a better quality of life.

In conclusion, my view is that we are focusing too much on the safeguarding of wild animals and birds and I believe other sectors which benefit everyone should have the resources they need.

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Biên Phạmwild animals and birds.

Wild animals include birds so, there is no need to mention them separately. You can delete the red part.