First of all, thank you a lot for helping me to correct and improve my writing skill and vocabulary.

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Early education has always been a notable issue in modern society. While some people believe that parenting is the major factor which turns children into brilliant citizens, some others argue that educating children is the responsibility of school. Although I accept that schools comprise an important role in teaching children, I would support the idea that their parents chiefly educate them to become good persons.

On the one hand, the statement that school is the most essential environment for children to develop is reasonable to some extents. Firstly, school provides children an open environment where they can form friendship and contact with various kinds of personality. Therefore, they are able to experience practical life and, gradually, know how to behave appropriately and respectably. Secondly, at school, children are taught by teachers who are specifically trained to be able to work effectively in the field of education. As a result, studying with teachers seems to be highly appreciated in orienting these amateurs.

On the other hand, it seems to me that parents take the most crucial part of educating children. It is obvious that since the earliest days, parents have been the closest to their children. Therefore, if adults do anything or react to something, children can spontaneously imitate them. Parents' activities are the daily examples for children to learn, then parenting is very important and should be noticed. In addition, several people usually claim that family is a smaller version of society. Teaching children appropriate behaviors among members of the family could be small but mighty lessons for them to be well-prepared before walking out to public community.

In conclusion, in spite of several undeniable benefits of schooling to children, I believe that it is better to educate children to become good citizens by smart parenting methods.

Early education has always been an notable issue in modern societies. (That is off-topic. There are problems with the education system, but that is not the topic of this essay.) While some people believe that parenting is the major factor which turns children into brilliant (wrong word) citizens, some others argue that educating children (too general) is the responsibility of the schools. Although I accept that schools comprise an important role in teaching children, I would support the idea that their parents chiefly educate them to become good persons.

On the one hand, the statement that school is the most essential environment for children to develop is reasonable to some extents. (wrong form) Firstly, First, school provides children an open environment where they can form friendship (wrong form) and contact (wrong form) with various kinds of personality. (wrong word) Therefore, they are able to experience practical life and, gradually, know how to behave appropriately and respectably. (wrong word) Secondly, Second, at school, children are taught by teachers who are specifically trained to be able to work effectively in the field of education. As a result, studying with teachers seems to be highly appreciated in orienting these amateurs. (wrong word)

On the other hand, it seems to me that parents take the most crucial part of educating children. It is obvious that since the earliest days, parents are have been the closest closer to their children than anyone else.. Therefore, if adults do anything or react to something, children can spontaneously imitate them. Parents' activities are the daily examples for children to learn, then (wrong word) parenting is very important and should be noticed. (wrong word) In addition, several people usually claim that family is a smaller version of society. Teaching children appropriate behaviors among members of the family could be small but mighty lessons for them to be well-prepared before walking out into the to public community.

In conclusion, in spite of several undeniable benefits of schooling to children, I believe that it is better for the parents to educate children to become good citizens by smart parenting methods.

Thank you so much for your detailed review.

But I have a question, why should we use 'First', 'Second' instead of 'Firstly', 'Secondly'? At my school, I have always been taught to use 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Finally', etc.

Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?

It is not wrong to use the -ly forms. However, these forms are dying out in American English; they are passé for all practical purposes. Even though they are grammatically correct, they sound very antiquated, stilted and old-fashioned, especially in American English. The "-ly" forms are still used in legal documents and very formal treatises and I hear the -ly forms very rarely in lectures given by British professors.

On the other hand, the forms without -ly are contemporary English and accepted in both British and American English. Business English style guides today advise not to use the -ly forms and use "first, second, third,...."

Here are some frequency statistics for first as compared to firstly. Click on the blue links, especially "firstly" in #3.

1. First is used as both an adjective and adverb, but mostly as an adjective.

2. Firstly is only used as an adverb .

3. When first as an adverb is compared to the adverb firstly , the overwhelming choice is "first."


The New York Times Manual on this subject is very succinct and clear.

This is really useful to me. Thank you very much