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Hello, Im taking the Ielts exam next week so can somebody please correct my essay for me and give a band score if possible. Thank you so much!

Topic: Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?

Prison is usually the most common punishment for all levels of crime. While some people argue that imprisonment should be replaced by more effective ways to help offenders such as education or vocational training, I completely disagree with this criminals treatment.

On the one hand, it is believed that non custodial sentences are likely to play an important role in helping offenders reintegrate back into society. For example, vocational education provided by the government may create a favorable condition for criminals to accumulate knowledge and essential job skills in order to land an occupation when they are released. In this way not only can they repay their community but also set a limit on re-offending chance. Another benefit is for the government as this is a solution for prison overcrowding which has imposed financial burdens on the national leaders for the cost of prison maintenance and expansion as well.


On the other hand, I strongly believe that education or job training is not a sufficient punishment. Law breakers, especially in major crimes, tend to pose a threat to the society if they are not locked up, away from other people. Therefore, only by putting them in prison can the authority ensures the safety for other citizens. Also, there is little room for doubt that imprisonment sentence serves as a way to give justice to the victims of a crime. This means that it is the criminals themselves that should get what they pay for and therefore be deprived of freedom in order to pay for the victims' loss.

In conclusion, I totally opposed to the view that it is better to utilize non custodial method of sentences rather than putting offenders in prison, because I believe that those who commit a crime should be put in prison for the sake of the whole society.

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Prison is usually often the standard most common punishment for all levels a variety of crimes. While some people argue that imprisonment should be replaced by more effective alternative ways to help offenders reform themselves, such as education or vocational training, I completely disagree with this approach. criminals treatment.

On the one hand, it is believed that non-custodial sentences are likely to be more effective play an important role in helping offenders reintegrate back into society. For example, vocational education provided by the government may create a favorable condition for criminals can help offenders to accumulate acquire knowledge and essential job skills in order to help them obtain work land an occupation when they are released. In this way, not only would they be able to contribute can they repay to their community, but also they would be less likely to turn to crime again. set a limit on re-offending chance. Another benefit is for the government as this is a of this solution is that there would be less for prison overcrowding, which has been a serious issue in many countries. imposed financial burdens on the national leaders for the cost of prison maintenance and expansion as well.

On the other hand, I strongly believe that education or job training is not a sufficient punishment. Lawbreakers, especially in where major crimes are involved, tend to pose a threat to the society if they are not locked up, away from other people. Therefore, only by putting them in prison can the authorities ensures the safety for of other citizens. Also, there is little room for doubt that imprisonment sentence serves as a strong deterrent for would-be criminals, and as a way to give of providing justice to the victims of crime. This means that it is the Criminals themselves that should get what they deserve and pay for and therefore be deprived of freedom in order to make them pay for their crimes. victims' loss.

In conclusion, I am totally opposed to the view that it is better to utilize employ non-custodial methods of sentences punishment rather than putting offenders in prison, because I believe that those who commit a crime should deserve to be put spend time in prison for the crimes they have committed. sake of the whole society.

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《GALAKTIKOS》:People hold different views as to whether or not criminals should be sent to serve a prison sentence. Although there are some advantages of imprisoning offenders, I would argue that it is better to equip them with occupational skills that allow them to lead an improved life through education.
Admittedly, punishing law breakers by incarceration can produce a deterring effect which forces people to give a second thought to committing a crime. This in turn could restrict the urge of anyone to offend and hence lower the crime rates. In addition, by confining those who are serial killers or frequent offenders in a cage, they could be prevented from harming other individuals and causing more problems to the society. Therefore, it is reasonable for us to claim that imprisonment is an effective way to deal with criminals.
On the other hand, educating criminals to be capable of securing a job and living a satisfactory life may be a better method to help them. For example, a burglar who is forced to rob a residence because he has a daughter waiting for an urgent surgery, which demands considerable amount of money, could be offered financial supports and opportunities to acquire advanced job skills allowing him to compensate for the loss of the victims. This could also be done for those who are already in prison. By equipping them with the ability to earn a living and blend in the society as competent social members, not only would they be thankful, but also they can bring a positive impact, benefiting both their families and the society.
In conclusion, penalizing criminals with long time confinement may have limited capacity in terms of preparing them for their after jail life. Educating them to be able to sustain their lives and make contributions to the society, on the other hand, is a more effective means to help them.
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