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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries.

What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

It is becoming more and more common that people with academic degrees leave their countries to find jobs abroad. Main reason is better quality of life that specific countries offers. However, this causes various problems to third world. In order to prevent that in the future, some changes have to be made.

Migrations of well-educated population have widely affected globalization. Doctors and teachers move to more developed countries such as the UK, and the USA. As a result the third world countries suffer from lack of workers in that fields. India is such an example, where young adults with good academic and practical skills leave their motherland, to pursue their careers. As a result of lacking workers is field of medicine and education, India’s public services are weak and it is not developing sufficiently. Citizens with special illnesses might not receive the essential health care treatments, therefore they will need to look for this abroad.

As generally this does not affect poorer countries positively, few steps can be taken to prevent that. Starting with, government should provide competitive salaries for education and health care field. In that case, people would get enough financial gain to cover their life expanses. Following, even though higher salary would provide for better quality of life, little financial help for young families would bring many benefits. Financial gain would not only make newborn’s supplies more affordable, but would also ensure that people would starting to create family earlier. That can positively affect society by increase birth rate.

In conclusion, well-educated people are moving to richer countries, which can adversely affect third world on long term. In order to prevent that, government should increase salaries and give financial gain to young families.

It is becoming more and more common that for people with academic degree qualifications to leave their countries to find look for jobs abroad. [ 1] Main reason is better quality of life that specific countries offers. There are certain reasons behind this phenomenon. However, this it causes various problems to third-world countries in particular. In order to prevent that in the future, some changes [ 2] have to be made. Nevertheless, measures can be implemented to tackle this issue.

The [ 3] emigration of well-educated population individuals can have a devastating impact on a country. have widely affected globalization. When doctors and teachers from impoverished nations move to more-developed countries such as the UK, and the USA, their home countries . As a result the third world countries suffer from lack a shortage of workers in that those fields. – a phenomenon called brain drain. India is such an example, where young adults with good academic and practical skills leave their motherland to pursue their careers and a better lifestyle abroad. As a result, of lacking workers is field of medicine and education, India’s public services are weak, and this impedes the development of that country. it is not developing sufficiently. Citizens For instance, it has been reported that Indian patients with special complex illnesses might sometimes cannot receive the essential health care necessary treatments because of a shortage of doctors and nurses there. , therefore they will need to look for this abroad.

As generally this does not affect poorer countries positively, few steps Nonetheless, there are some effective measures which can be implemented to deal with this problem. taken to prevent that. Starting with, For a start, governments can [ 2] should provide competitive salaries for education and health care field. financial incentives for medical professionals and academics to encourage them to remain in their home countries. In that case, such people would think twice before emigrating. get enough financial gain to cover their life expanses. Following, even though higher salary would provide for better quality of life, little financial help for young families would bring many benefits. Financial gain would not only make newborn’s supplies more affordable, but would also ensure that people would starting to create family earlier. That can positively affect society by increase birth rate. [ 4]

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[ 1]: That sentence is a finding. It belongs in the conclusion.

[ 2]: Do not preach in an essay.

[ 3]: Learn the difference between migration, emigration and immigration.

[ 4]: Part of that is repetitive and the rest is off topic. Instead, you can talk about how a government can provide attractive education opportunities and better facilities for the children of those professionals.

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