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The given pie chart and table illustrate the primary factors that negatively affect the productivity of agricultural land and the percentage of land degradation among 3 regions due to those causes mention during the period of 1990.

As is observed in 2 diagrams, over-grazing accounted for the largest percentage of unproductive land and the region most affected by this factor is Occeania.

According to the pie chart, the core cause of this issue is over-grazing with the highest percentage (35%). It is followed closely by deforestation and over-cultivation with 30% and 28% relatively. Moreover, there are some other reasons that only accounted for a small percentage (7%).

From the data of the table, Europe is the region that is most attacked by these factors with 23% of the total land degraded, in which, the rate of negative impacts cause by forestation is 9,8% . Meanwhile, North America is rarely influenced by forest fires (0,2 %), but the most remarkable reason is over-cultivation with 3,3%, which is less than 4.4% compared to Europe (7,7%). Futhermore, the percentage of land degraded by over-grazing in Occeania is 11,3% that also the highest rate among 3 regions, while this area is hardly affected by overcultivation which stood at 0%.

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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The given pie chart and table illustrate the primary factors that negatively affect the productivity of agricultural land and the percentage of land degradation among 3 regions due to those causes mention during the period of 1990.

As is observed in 2 diagrams, over-grazing accounted for the largest percentage of unproductive land and the region most affected by this factor is Occeania.

According to the pie chart, the core cause of this issue is over-grazing with the highest percentage (35%). It is followed closely by deforestation and over-cultivation with 30% and 28% relatively. Moreover, there are some other reasons that only accounted for a small percentage (7%).

From the data of the table, Europe is the region that is most attacked by these factors with 23% of the total land degraded, in which, the rate of negative impacts cause by forestation is 9,8% . Meanwhile, North America is rarely influenced by forest fires (0,2 %), but the most remarkable reason is over-cultivation with 3,3%, which is less than 4.4% compared to Europe (7,7%). Futhermore, the percentage of land degraded by over-grazing in Occeania is 11,3% that also the highest rate among 3 regions, while this area is hardly affected by overcultivation which stood at 0%.

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