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Task:

The table illustrates quantity of tourists to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after it was refurbished while the charts give information about the outcomes survey asking tourists how satisfied they were during two periods as well as the table shows.

Overall, it is evident that there is an effective improvement in numbers of visitors after refurbishment. Besides, each different type of visitor satisfaction also experienced a remarkable change.

As regards number of visitors, before the upgrade the museum received 74000 tourists to explore. However, it significantly increased to 92000 after the construction was finished.

When it comes to the result of surveys, obviously the largest of visitor satisfaction before and after refurbishment shared the same percentage for Dissatisfied and Satisfied respectively at 40%. In details, after two periods, the most positive satisfaction rose from 15% to 35%, followed by the satisfied increased slightly by 10% to 30%. By contrast, the other opposed attitudes witnessed a negative change: the proportion of dissatisfied plunged from 40% to 15%, whereas the figure of very dissatisfied halved to 5%, leaving no response remained during two periods.

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The table illustrates quantity gives the number of tourists (wrong word) to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after it was refurbished. while The two pie charts give information about the outcomes the levels of satisfaction (very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied) from visitor surveys taken during the same two years. asking tourists how satisfied they were during two periods as well as the table shows.

Overall, it is evident that ("Clear, obvious, evident, apparent" - these are opinion words. Do not write opinions in Task 1. ) there is (wrong tense) an effective improvement in numbers of more visitors after refurbishment. Besides, each different type of visitor satisfaction also experienced a remarkable change. (That tells the reader nothing at all. Along with higher numbers, the people who visited the museum were, on average, much more satisfied by their experience. )

As regards number of visitors, before the upgrade, the museum received 74000 tourists (wrong word. "tourist" and "visitor" have different meanings.) to explore. However, it significantly (use numbers - in Task 1 use quantitative rather than qualitative words. Use a calculator in Task 1 to get a better score!) increased by almost 25% to 92000 the year after the project construction was finished.

When it comes to the result of surveys, obviously the largest of visitor satisfaction before and after refurbishment shared the same percentage for Dissatisfied and Satisfied respectively at 40%. In details, after two periods, (wrong usage) the most positive satisfaction rose from 15% to 35%, followed by the satisfied increased slightly by 10% to 30%. By contrast, the other opposed attitudes witnessed (Do not use the anthropomorphic verbs "see", "experience" or "witness" in Task 1. Attitudes cannot see or witness anything. They have no eyes. ) a negative change: the proportion of dissatisfied plunged from 40% to 15%, whereas the figure (In Task 1, the word "figure" usually refers to diagrams, charts, or graphs, not numbers. Avoid using the word "figure" for values or numbers.) of very dissatisfied halved to 5%, leaving no response remained during two periods.


Some simple calculations would be much more meaningful for your reader.

Computing or deriving values from the numbers on the charts and graphs is a great way to succeed in Task 1. In this example, there are two calculations you can do.

1. Add the satisfaction levels together and compare before and after:

After the refurbishment, 75% of the visitors were satisfied or very satisfied compared to less than half (45%) before.

2. Compute a score or grade for the museum (like a grade point average in university.)

If we assign numbers to the levels, 4 being most satisfied and 1 being most dissatisfied, the weighted satisfaction level increased from 2.5 (neutral) to 3.1 (satisfied) after the renovation.

I got these numbers this way:

From the survey before the renovation: (15 X 4) + (30 X 3) + (40 X 2) + (10 X 1) = 240. Divide by 95 (the people who didn't answer are not considered) = 2.5. Since a 3 is satisfied, and 2 is dissatisfied, a 2.5 grade is neither satisfied nor dissatisfied. That is a neutral rating.

From the survey after the renovation: (35 X 4) + (40 X 3) + (15 X 2) + (5 X 1) = 305. Divide by 95 (the people who didn't answer are not considered) = 3.1. That is close to a level 3 = satisfied.


Model essay for your study purposes: Paragraph 1 describes the figures. Use more than one sentence. Paragraph 2 gives an overview of the data shown on the figures. Paragraph 3 gives more details.

The table and two pie charts together show the effect of a refurbishment project at the Ashdown Museum on both the numbers of visitors and their satisfaction levels. In particular, the table shows the numbers of attendees in the year before and the year after the project. The two pie charts show the results of satisfaction surveys in those same time periods. The satisfactions levels on the charts are: very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied and very dissatisfied. The charts show the percentages of each level taken from the surveys.

Overall, the visitor numbers increased 25% from before (74000) to after (92000). In addition, the visitors who came after the renovation were more satisfied with their museum experience. Ninety-five percent responded to the survey in each year.

In detail, after the refurbishment, 75% of the visitors were satisfied or very satisfied compared to less than half (45%) before. The percent who said they were very dissatisfied dropped by half, from 10% to 5%. A satisfaction grade can be computed for each survey by assigning numbers to the levels, 4 being most satisfied and 1 being most dissatisfied. After the project, the grade, or weighted satisfaction level, increased from 2.5 (neutral) to 3.1 (satisfied).

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Thank you very much, i have some questions:

  • AlpheccaStarsin Task 1 use quantitative rather than qualitative words. Use a calculator in Task 1 to get a better score!

I do not understand this sentence, can you explain what does it mean?

  • I see in your sample essay, the paragraph giving details looks quite short, will this be done ?
  • AlpheccaStarsDo not use the anthropomorphic verbs "see", "experience" or "witness" in Task 1. Attitudes cannot see or witness anything. They have no eyes.

Where do these words use ?

  • I have heard that Task 1 limits number of words to 150, doesn't it ?

Hope for your answer.

Universal AniLolAlpheccaStarsin Task 1 use quantitative rather than qualitative words. Use a calculator in Task 1 to get a better score! I do not understand this sentence, can you explain what does it mean?

Qualitative words: some, few, slight, large, enormous, gigantic - words without numerical values

Quantitative words: less than 1%, 16, - words with numerical values

Compare these two versions. Both are correct and good English. Which one would a university professor give a higher score to?

1. (Qualitative) Due to inflation, rents have increased a lot. The average family spends a larger portion of its income on rent.

2. (Quantitative) Due to inflation, rents have increased by 10% over the past twelve months. The average family used to spend 25% of its income on rent, and that has gone up to 30%.

Universal AniLolWhere do these words use ?

I do not understand the question. You can use these words in Task 2. Avoid these words in Task 1.

Task 2: The years 1972-1979 saw / witnessed higher inflation. (This is a good narrative, a good story. You want to talk about the problems people suffered during this time.)

Task 1: There was high inflation during the period 1972-1979. (This is matter-of-fact and mathematical. It describes a line graph of inflation rates over the last century.)

Universal AniLolI have heard that Task 1 limits number of words to 150, doesn't it ?

The minimum word count is 150. If you write 125 words, you will get a lower score.

If you write 200 words, there is no penalty on your score.

The given table illustrates the total number of visitors visits to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after refurbishment continuously.Looking to the given pie-chart represents results of survey's visitor satisfaction in thought of very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied as well as no response. Globally, 50% and 15% results are exented to very satisfied and satisfied. A further 55% and 70% visitor's results since dissatisfied and very dissatisfied. Other no response for only 10%.Comparing to table and pie-chart, The number of visitors visits museum before and after refurbishment in the number of 74000 as soon as 92000. The pie-chart given the thought of visitors in %.Overall, it is clear that Ashdown Museum preferred to shows the opinion of visitors in the year before and after refurbishment.
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