With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the past decades, there has been a growing trend towards the progressive quickening rapid of technological in communication from smartphones, tablets to other mobile devices in both developed and developing nations for variety of reasons.

Given that the above-mentioned one may bring several downsides, especially for the young generation, it also accompanies with highly justifiable, from my point of view.

There are a number of reasons why these developments bring several advantages. It is undeniable that telephone and internet revolutionize the way we communicate as well as strengthen relationship. I can easily exchange emails with best friend of mine who had to live far away the country. Or if i have to make a really important decision or something is boring me, I just simply press the buttons on my phone in order to ask a good friend for advice. Besides, technology help people to transmit messages rapidly, especially in office work. For example, an appointment that cannot be met due to an unexpected incident, can quickly be cancelled by writing a text message or sending an email within seconds to their business partners.

On the one hand, many people believe that the substantial development of technologically equipment in this field do more harm than good.The availability of cutting-edge technologies is the primary consequence of leading to isolate and discourage real interaction. For instance, many young people choose to make friends online rather than meeting face to face, which accidentally make a distance in interacting with each other in the real life, and these “virtual” relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.

In conclusion, although some experts imply that this trend benefits society , especially in communication field, it seems to me that disadvantages still outweigh the advantages.

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Over the past decades, there has been a growing trend towards the progressive quickening rapid (You have 3 adjectives here without a noun.) of technological (You have an adjective here without a noun.) in communication from smartphones, tablets to other mobile devices in both developed and developing nations for (missing word) variety of reasons. (You did not state your thesis in the first paragraph.)

Given that the above-mentioned one (???) may bring (wrong verb) several downsides, especially for the young generation, it also accompanies (accompanies what?) with highly justifiable (You have an adjective here without a noun.) , from my point of view. (I do not understand your sentence. It is not good English.)

There are a number of reasons why these developments bring several advantages. It is undeniable that telephone and internet revolutionize the way we communicate as well as strengthen relationship. I can easily exchange emails with best friend of mine (unnatural) who had to live far away (missing word) the country. Or if i have to make a really important decision or something is boring me, I just simply press the buttons on my phone in order to ask a good friend for advice. Besides, technology help people to transmit messages rapidly, especially in office work. For example, an appointment that cannot be met due to an unexpected incident, can quickly be cancelled by writing a text message or sending an email within seconds to their business partners.

On the one hand, many people believe that the substantial development of technologically (An adverb cannot modify a noun.) equipment in this field do more harm than good.The availability of cutting-edge technologies is the primary consequence of leading to isolate and discourage real interaction. (??) For instance, many young people choose to make friends online rather than meeting face to face, which accidentally make a distance in interacting with each other in the real life, and these “virtual” relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.

In conclusion, although some experts imply that this trend benefits society , especially in communication field, (unnatural) it seems to me that disadvantages still outweigh the advantages.

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Over the past decades, there has been a growing trend towards the quickening rapidity of technological communication from smartphones, tablets to other mobile devices in both developed and developing nations. It has affected relationships in various ways, and in my opinion there are both positive and negative effects.

There are a number of reasons why these developments bring several advantages. Firstly, t is undeniable that telephone and internet revolutionize the way we communicate in business, education and social life. Thanks to them, business people all over the world are able to interact without ever meeting each other. Secondly, services like Skype create new possibilities for relationships between students and teachers. A student can now take video lessons with a teacher in a different city or country. Or channels online like Youtube bring a great deal of free English knowledge and extremely essential for student that is studying English or want to improve it without needing in order to enroll in English language centers.

However, many argued that the substantial development of technological devices in this field do more harm than good. Particularly, the availability of new communication technologies can have the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For example, many young people tend to use popular apps like Facebook, instagram in order to make a new friends and chat online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these "virtual" relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.

In conclusion, although some experts imply that this trend cause drawbacks society, it seems to me that advantages still outweigh the disadvantages.

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1994I have a trouble with paraphrasing sentences.

Why do you feel the need to paraphrase? I only paraphrase when there is a very complex paragraph and someone asks me to rewrite it to make the meaning clearer. Random paraphrasing just for the sake of paraphrasing seldom leads to good results. In fact, it generally makes your writing worse. Paraphrasing when you are describing charts and graphs is particularly treacherous. Using a variety of vocabulary words is good when writing stories about your life and the lives of other people.

To avoid repetition, use pronouns and make your own definitions of terms you will use in the opening paragraph.

Focus on accurate descriptions, excellent content and well-constructed sentences.

OK..I understood. I will try then apply it in my writing. Thank you

Over the past decades, there has been a steady growing trend towards development of better the quickening rapidity of technological communications technology with the use of cellular networks, from smartphones, tablets and to other mobile devices in both developed and developing nations. It has affected people's relationships and societies in various ways, and in my opinion there are both positive and negative effects.

The premise stated is: The disadvantages of advanced communications technologies outweigh the advantages. You need to answer the question: To what extent do you agree or disagree. You have not given your answer in the first paragraph. Saying "there are positives and negatives" does not answer the question. Here are some examples of how you can answer "to what extent": completely/totally agree/disagree, wholeheartedly agree, somewhat agree / disagree, partially agree/disagree, neither agree nor disagree, agree with specific caveats discussed in the following paragraphs.

There are a number of reasons why these developments bring several advantages. First, (firstly, secondly, thirdly... are depreciated in modern writing. Instead, use "first, second, third," These words are cleaner, more elegant and completely acceptable.) it is undeniable that the telephone and the internet have revolutionized the way we communicate in business, education and social life. Thanks to them, business people all over the world are able to interact without ever meeting each other. Second, services like Skype create new possibilities for relationships between students and teachers. A student can now take video lessons from with a teacher in a different city or country. Or channels online video channels like Youtube bring a great deal of free English instruction / tutorials knowledge and which are extremely valuable essential for a student who that is studying English or wants to improve it without needing in order to enroll in English language centers.

However (On the other hand), many argue argued that these substantial development of technological personal communication devices in this field are misused and do more harm than good. Particularly, they availability of new communication technologies can have the result of isolating people and discouraging face-to-face real interaction. For example, many young people tend to use popular apps like Facebook and Instagram in order to make a new friends and chat online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these "virtual" relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.

In conclusion, although some experts assert imply that this trend causes drawbacks societies to weaken, it seems to me that the advantages still outweigh the disadvantages. So I generally disagree with the statement.

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