Hello everyone,

I'm from Israel. I would like you to check my grammer please.

I wrote a little essay about Australia, please correct my Spelling,My grammer and all the things..

Thx!

Part I:

Australia is the smallest continent in the world.

Australia's territory sprawls on 7.68 million square kilometer.

Australia is the only continent which is controlled by one political existence.

Australia consists of six states: New South Wales, Queensland, South Australia, Tasmania, Victoria and Western Australia.

Nowadays, most of the population of Australia is white-skinned, however, the original residents were dark-skinned (the Indigenous Australians that currently are the minority in the continent).

Part II:

Australia has no borders without any countries.

It's a giant island which its neighbors countries are Indonesia, East Timor and Papua New Guinea to the north, the Solomon Islands, Vanuatu and New Caledonia to the north-east, and New Zealand to the south-east.

The capital of Australia is Canberra.

Australia became an independent country in 1 January 1901 (federation of UK colonies).

According to July 2005, Australia's population counts 20,090,437 residents.

The major language which is spoken is English (79.1%).

Besides that, the major religion is the Christian 75%.

Moreover, age 15 and over can read and write. (Total population: 100% ; male: 100% ; female: 100%).

The used currency in Australia is Australian Dollar (AUD) [$].

Australia's main sources of income are: bauxite, coal, iron ore, copper, tin, gold, silver, uranium, nickel, tungsten, mineral sands, lead, zinc, diamonds, natural gas, petroleum.
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anyone? please, I need a correction quickly, and if you can replace some words to better ones, I would thank you.

Thanks!
Hi Anonymous,

I can correct it for you but this doesn't really look like an essay, it looks more like a statistical chart sort of thing on Australia. An essay has an introduction, body and a conclusion, all of which are not found in here. I just said this hoping you're aware of what an essay really looks like, no offence meant.Emotion: smile

Part I:

Australia is the smallest continent in the world. Its territory sprawls to 7.68 million kilometer square.It is also the only continent (delete which is) controlled by a single political existence.

Australia consists of six states: New South Wales, Queensland, South Australia, Tasmania, Victoria and Western Australia.

(delete nowadays) Most of the people in Australia are white-skinned, however, the original residents were dark-skinned (the Indigenous Australians (delete that) currently are the minority in the continent).

Part II:

Australia has no borders with any country.It's a giant island and its neighbour countries are Indonesia, East Timor and Papua New Guinea to the north, the Solomon Islands, Vanuatu and New Caledonia to the north-east, and New Zealand to the south-east.

The capital of Australia is Canberra.

Australia became an independent country in 1 January 1901 (federation of UK colonies).According to July 2005, Australia's population counts to 20,090,437 residents.

The major language (delete which is) spoken is English (79.1%) and its major religion is Christianism which accounts to 75% of the population.

Literacy rate counts to 15 years and above. (Total population: 100% ; male: 100% ; female: 100%).

Australia's currency is the Australian Dollar (AUD) [$].

Australia's main sources of income are derived from bauxite, coal, iron ore, copper, tin, gold, silver, uranium, nickel, tungsten, mineral sands, lead, zinc, diamonds, natural gas and petroleum.
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Ok thanks.

I improved it a bit, can you re-check it please? Emotion: big smile

2 Things, Tell me if the using of:

1)Whose

2)When saying: "Australia controlled by..." Don't I need to add "is" before the controlled? (It's passive no?)

The new text: (It's not an essay..)

Part I

Australia is the smallest continent in the world.

Its territory sprawls to 7.68 million square kilometers.

It is also the only continent controlled by a single political existence.

Australia consists of six states: New South Wales, Queensland, South Australia, Tasmania, Victoria and Western Australia.

Nowadays, most of the population of Australia is white-skinned.

However, the original residents were dark-skinned (the Indigenous Australians currently are the minority part of the continent).

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Part II

Australia has no borders with any other countries.

It is a giant island whose neighbors countries are: Indonesia, East Timor and Papua New Guinea to the north, the Solomon Islands, Vanuatu and New Caledonia to the north-east, and New Zealand to the south-east.

The capital of Australia is Canberra.

Australia became an independent country in the 01/01/1901 (federation of UK colonies).

According to July 2005, Australia's population counts to 20,090,437 residents.

The major language spoken is English (79.1%).

Besides that, Australia's major religion is Christianity which accounts to 75% of the population.

Moreover, age 15 and over can read and write. (Total population: 100% ; male: 100% ; female: 100%).

Australia's currency is the "Australian Dollar" (AUD $).

Australia's main sources of income are derived from: bauxite, coal, iron ore, copper, tin, gold, silver, uranium, nickel, tungsten, mineral sands, lead, zinc, diamonds, natural gas, petroleum.
HI Anon,

I edited your post to clean up the formatting.
Good day Anonymous,

It looks better now but I see that you still haven't changed some of the amendments I made earlier.

It is also the only continent controlled by a single political existence.

Yes, the sentence is in passive form and you don't need to add 'is' anywhere.

Here's the corrected sentences:

(delete nowadays) Most of the people in Australia are white-skinned, however, the original residents were dark-skinned

Australia has no borders with any country.

its neighbour countries

Australia became an independent country in 1 January 1901 (please don't abbreviate important dates)

The major language spoken is English (79.1%) and its major religion is Christianism which accounts to 75% of the population.

Literacy rate counts to 15 years and above. (delete Moreover, age 15 and over can read and write.)

Savvy

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Ok thx.

But, In the 1st sentece, The morever is pretty important for me, she (The teacher) wanted us to use as more connectors as we can.

2nd: "Australia has no borders with any other countries" is better nah?

3rd: whose is better language (higher) nop? :X

4th: ok thx ^_^

5th: I looked in the dictionary, no such word as "Christianism" :<

6th: Literacy not necessarily means that they knows how to read and write :X

So any other suggestions please? Emotion: big smile
-Literacy means the ability to read and write and it's not wrong.

-I'm so sorry about Christianity, I confused it with Catholicism so it should be the major religion is Christianity.

You can keep the rest if you want, your teacher will correct it for you.

Savvy
Ok thx..

And one more thing, about the: sprawls to , can i change it to sprawls over? [Sounds better]

Thx.
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