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Dear Teachers!

- Please correct the sentences below if you find any mistakes

1. You have success when you can choose the right in the wrong, when you have attributtions for the world around you, and you appreciate things which are really important, such as family and friends.

2. While other people think that famous athletes, actresses, actors, musicians are good types and good examples, then my Mom was really my inspiration, and she was still my inspiration later years. My Mom taught me that dilligence never kill anybody. My Mom was really my heroine. My Mom, my family and my friends brought me more happinesses than anything else in life.

3. At the end of my life, I don't want other people to think about me like a man who just likes doing nothing and say " I did it!". I don't want to broast/brag that I tried my best for my career, because there were some days I didn't feel like working hard at all. But anyway I tried my best, because that's my true nature/substance.

- Thanks very much to Teachers.

Stevenukd.
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Hi Stevenukd,

I'll try my bid.Emotion: smile

1. You can be succesful when you know to distinguish the right from the wrong, when you have attributtions for the world around you, and when you can appreciate things which are really important, such as family and friends.

2. While most people think that famous athletes, actresses, actors, musicians make good icons, for me, my mom is my real source of inspiration, and she has always been my inspiration throughout the years. My Mom taught me that dilligence never kills anybody. My Mom was my real heroine. My Mom, my family and my friends brought me more happiness than anyone else in life.

3. At the end of my life, I don't want other people to think about me like a man who did nothing and said" I did it!". I don't want to boast that I worked very hard for my career, because there were some days I didn't feel like working hard at all. But anyway I tried my best, because that's my true nature/substance.
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You might want to consider these changes. (I don't know if I correctly understood every point made in nos.1 and 3.

1. You are successful when you can distinguish right from wrong, when you make a contribution to the world around you, and when you appreciate the things that are really important, such as family and friends.

2. While some people think that famous athletes, actresses, actors, musicians are good role models, I think my own Mom is my best role model.. She was my inspiration, not only early on, but in later years as well. My Mom taught me that diligence never killed anybody. My Mom was my heroine. My Mom, my family and my friends have brought me more happiness than anyone else in life.

3. At the end of my life, I don't want people to think of me as a man who liked to say 'I did it', when I did nothing. It's my nature to try my best, but I don't want to boast about it because there were some days when I didn't feel like working hard at all.