Opinions are devided regarding whether parents should opt for homeschooling or not. While a multitude of people are of the opinion that this educational route are beneficial, I believe that its demerits are far weighter than the merits.

On the one hand, being home aducated can bring about numerous positive effects. Firstly, having been taught at home, kids can be protected from violence and bullying which are alarming issues in schools nowadays, thereby enhancing their both mental and physical well-being. Secondly, homeschooled children have opportunities to spend a large amount of time with their parents, thus the bonds between them are strengthened significantly. This is often not the case in traditional schooling especially boarding school because most of the time they have to study at school.

On the other hand, I personally contend that substantial disadvantages are more obvious because home educated children’s emotional development might be impeded. This is attributed to the dearth of interaction with classmates and teachers. Children therefore find it is difficult to obtain cooperation and communication skills. Futhermore, homeschoolers are less likely to face up to peer pressure which can play an important roles in facilitating the persuit of academic excellence. For example, a children learning in a group of friends are tend to have more motivation to study harder since they want to be better than other members of the group.

In conclusion, after weighing the pros and cons, I would say that the pitfalls of parents self-teach method are insurmountable, far exceeding the aforementioned plus points.

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Opinions are devided (spelling) regarding whether parents should opt for homeschooling or not. While a multitude (not a good word choice) of people are of the opinion that this educational route are (wrong form) beneficial, I believe that its demerits (wrong word - not a good synonym) are far weighter (wrong spelling) than the merits.

On the one hand, being home aducated can bring about numerous positive effects. Firstly, First, having been taught if they are taught at home, kids (informal, casual) can be protected from violence and bullying which are alarming issues in schools nowadays, thereby enhancing (wrong word) their both mental and physical well-being. Secondly, Second, homeschooled children have opportunities to spend a large amount of time with their parents, (comma splice error) thus the bonds between them are strengthened significantly. This is often not the case in traditional schooling especially boarding school because most of the time they have to study at school.

On the other hand, I personally contend that (Do not write your opinions in the body paragraphs. They are in the opening paragraph. ) the substantial disadvantages are more obvious because the home educated children’s emotional development of home-educated children is delayed. might be impeded. This is attributed to the lack dearth of healthy interactions with classmates and teachers. These children therefore find it is difficult to cooperate and communicate with others. obtain cooperation and communication skills. Futhermore, homeschoolers are less likely to face up to peer pressure which can play an important roles in facilitating the persuit of academic excellence. For example, a children learning in a group of friends are tend to have more motivation to study harder since they want to be better than other members of the group.

In conclusion, after weighing the pros and cons, I would say that the pitfalls of homeschooling parents self-teach method are insurmountable, far exceeding the aforementioned (Remove "aforementioned, aforesaid, and even "above mentioned" from your vocabulary list) its limited benefits. plus points

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