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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? How could these problems be reduced?

In this modern world, it is commonly believed that citizen’s longevity has witnessed an upward trend in many industrialized nations. While this problem could trigger some undesirable outcomes, a number of viable remedies could be adopted to mitigate these potential problems.

This matter could cause some pressing troubles which can be anticipated. Firstly, one of them could be that this could lead to putting a heavy burden on the state budget. In fact, more and more people of retirement age who will be eligible for receiving a pension, governments must devote a large budget to serve their demands such as health system, welfare, and services. Secondly, another drawback associated with this setback is that the labor forces decrease significantly, governments might receive less money in taxes which have negative effects on government spending.

Several practical measures could be implemented to alleviate the described above. One of the effective solutions could be to increase the retirement age for labor workers since low retirement age has negative impacts on socio-economy development. For example: the Vietnamese government has proposed adjusting the increasing of retirement age for males to 65 and females to 60. Another measure is that governments should encourage immigration in order to increase the number of employees who pay taxes and ensure the labor force for countries, which contributes to the sustainable development of the nations. In addition, it is necessary to educate elder people about the importance of money management and saving for retirement, which helps them to be independent in finance that decreases the heavy burden of the government.

In conclusion, this problem poses potential threats to governments, yet there would be some feasible methods to solve this burning issue.

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In this modern (Not a good synonym. Also, it repeats the words later in the sentence.) world, it is commonly believed (poor word choice. The observation is based on actual data. It is a proven fact, not a belief.) that citizen’s (One person? What country does this individual belong to?) longevity has witnessed (Wrong expression. Longevity is a measurement. Measurements do not witness anything. They cannot see or hear.) an upward trend in many industrialized nations. While this problem (What problem? You have not identified any problem.) could trigger some undesirable outcomes, a number of viable remedies could be adopted to mitigate these potential problems. (repetitious)

This matter (not a good word choice. ) could cause some pressing troubles which can be anticipated. Firstly, First, one of them could be that this could (repetitious) lead to putting a heavy burden on the state budget. In fact, more and more people of retirement age who will be eligible for receiving a pension, (That is a noun phrase. The reader expects it to be the subject of a verb. But now you write a different noun. The sentence is ungrammatical.) governments must devote a large budget to serve their demands such as a healthcare system, welfare, and services. Secondly, Second, another drawback associated with this setback (wrong expression) is that the labor forces (wrong expression. The correct noun is the singular "workforce".) decrease significantly, (comma splice error) governments might receive less money in taxes which have (wrong form) negative effects on government spending.

Several practical measures could be implemented to alleviate this. the described above. (wrong expression, ungrammatical) One of the effective solutions could be to increase the retirement age for labor workers since a low retirement age has negative impacts on socio-economy (not a word) development. For example: (wrong punctuation) the Vietnamese government has proposed adjusting the increasing (wrong expression) of retirement age for males to 65 and females to 60. Another measure is that governments should encourage immigration in order to increase the number of employees who pay taxes and ensure the labor force for countries, which contributes to the sustainable development of the nations. (wrong form) In addition, it is necessary to educate elder (wrong form) people about the importance of money management and saving for retirement, which helps them to be independent in finance that decreases (wrong expression) the heavy burden of the government.

In conclusion, this problem poses potential threats to governments, yet there are would be some feasible methods to solve it. this burning issue.

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